The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Leadership is best developed, whether it be in the field of government, industry, or any other field, when there exist a sense of co-operation among the people. The prominent existence of cooperation among young people leads towards the journey where everyone gets benefitted through each other in terms of knowledge sharing, growing together with evolutionary visions and thoughts sharing. Whereas, the sense of competition among each individuals may hinder the process of developing leadership qualities among them: this idea may bring out the unnecessary unhealthy competitions among young individuals resulting in more jealousy, envy and bitterness in others progress, hindering own development throughout.
Leadership is best known to have developed in an individual if the individual can work for other people and can foster the growth of all society, nation, or even world as a whole; and, it is possible to work for others, rising from individual needs and selfishness only when a person is social enough or cooperating enough with other individuals. It is possible to know the circumstances and reality of the society, nation and problems faced by the people only with cooperation among each other and the person can have better plans on his development of leadership by advocating the needs and concerns of the people. For example, considering the success of former president Barack Obama of America, it can be understood that his background as a average child having common life and relationship with cooperating nature made him so successful. Had he been raised in sense of unhealthy competition and jealousy, it would certainly have hindered his learning process hindering leadership as a whole.
Many critics or people might argue against the leadership development through cooperation by considering the lack of opposing views and contradictions that might be helpful for developing an individual suitable for any kind of situations. However, the learning process grows more in favourable environment where the mind is more bolstered and free to think peacefully with matching views among people. The mind can grow more with alike minded people and cooperation among people than in competition where other individual selfishness overshadows the thoughts for other people.For example, in any company or organization we can often see the growth and betterment when there is cooperation and a single leadership with supports from workers rather than everybody through sense of competition trying to work out their own plans.
Hence, although, the idea that competition might favour in learning and developing of leadership in new circumstances, making an individual a suitable leader in different situation- out of the comfort zone, cannot be totally neglected but the idea of sense of cooperation helping leadership development more prominently, overshadows the previous idea. Thus it is better to instill sense of cooperation rather competition in young individuals by certain extent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, so, still, thus, whereas, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2540.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 462.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49783549784 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05554422618 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474025974026 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 784.8 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 23.0359550562 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.0043779152 60.3974514979 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 211.666666667 118.986275619 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.5 23.4991977007 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166349224777 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755585248177 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487655087199 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110538651753 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205697044766 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.7 14.1392134831 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.45 48.8420337079 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 12.1743820225 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.2143820225 153% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.