An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
According to the given facts as development of new breeds of vitamin A rich millet and its requirements to be promoted for decreasing the deficiency of the typical vitamin in people of tagus, I personally feel lack of proper research on how the new millet breed is going to act as remedy. The argument shows that the new breed millet are rich in vitamin A;however, it has not properly addressed the requirements of these new millet to prosper properly and provide sufficient production as required. Generally, it is significant to have adequate production of these foods in order to make it feasible among impoverished nations because in lack of proper production feasibility it may be difficult for people to adopt these new products for farming.
Another biggest concern regarding the millet is its resistance capacity, existence potential and survival tendency on the climate, soil type, natural climates, and different natural pests. If the breed is more vulnerable and prone to these certain circumstances, then it is more unfeasible and the tendency of this remedy being futile is high.
Although the organization poses that the farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety, the extent of information doesnot clearly indicate the source of subsidies payment to the farmers. There is no clear indication on the possibility of the subsidies payment to the farmers if its going to be from the side of government or the organization itself.
There are no any claims on the success rate of this new breed in the natural environment or experimental environment itself as well. Only being vitamin A rich source cannot make the breed supreme over other different possibilities and choices which may offer remedies economical to this one.
There has been lack of comparisons to other remedial solutions in order to post new variety of millet as the best one and suitable for the pertaining situation which indicates lack of proper research. Also the research regarding the consumption pattern of millet by people of the region is to be in question: if the well adopted consumption pattern of millet is done in such a way that the vitamin A of the millet may not be available for digestion then it would be waste to expend on the new variety.
Thus to promote this new type of millet only on the basis of given facts and premises is little unwise and may not prove fruitful.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 1955 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.851 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.766 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.583 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.476 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.671 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'subsidies'' or 'subsidy's'?
Suggestion: subsidies'; subsidy's
...ar indication on the possibility of the subsidies payment to the farmers if its going to ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: IT_IS[19]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...the subsidies payment to the farmers if its going to be from the side of government...
^^^
Line 4, column 11, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... or the organization itself. There are no any claims on the success rate of this ...
^^
Line 5, column 201, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...hich indicates lack of proper research. Also the research regarding the consumption ...
^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...be waste to expend on the new variety. Thus to promote this new type of millet only...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 402.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94527363184 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81672895939 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470149253731 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.0344540291 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 165.666666667 119.503703932 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5 23.324526521 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413129983519 0.218282227539 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145979932612 0.0743258471296 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852041299079 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18388366876 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0844565043822 0.0628817314937 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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