The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Instilling competition in young people creates a loner perspective, where they not only prefer to do things on their own but they feel as if they must do everything on their own. This mentality does not integrate properly into any role in society, especially a leadership one. As a whole, humans have created a society that is codependent on each other. Although being to do everything yourself may seem like a nice idea, it is a completely unrealistic and disadvantageous one. When one person does not have the skill or born talent to do something, they bring it to someone who can. This system creates a world where everyone combines their talents and skills to make everything the best possible version it can be.
Competition can instill a fear in young people that leads them to believe they are unable to trust others. In doing this, they will likely isolate themselves from the rest of the world. A person that is unable to trust or communicate with the rest of the population makes a very poor leader. Say a young man or woman is taught at a young age that everything is a competition and the only way to get ahead in life is to win those competitions. Now say that person grew up and decided to run for a position in government, yes their focus on competition may help them win an election but what about after that? They have no sense of working as a team so they would not want to listen to the public. They would struggle to work with the other members of congress, house of representives, etc.
On the other hand is the idea that competition pushes young people to strive for an excellence that they may not have before. Competition can be a vry useful tool to put help young generations find out what they are capable of when there is something to gain or lose. This strategy is a clever one but only if used at appropriate times and sparingly. If competition is the sole and main sense instilled in young people, they will likely over exert themselves and go through an early burn out or plateu.
Cooperation is an important part of society. It allows people to have the best versions of the things around them and allows them to perform as the best versions of themselves. Teaching youth to understance how to cooperate with their peers will prepare them for how to accomplish their goals and still work with the people surrounding them.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, still, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59101654846 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64723905831 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513002364066 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3270665802 60.3974514979 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.1 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.15 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.1 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203553147655 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572362379285 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545721083793 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129056399914 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0401635221643 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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