The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry,
or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling
reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The leadership characteristics and roles played by the leaders are not completely similar in all fields. Since leading requires both cooperation with the fellow people and competion with the rival leaders and the extent of these two requirements are different in various fields, one cannot summarily negate the importance of the sense of competition for prioritizing the sense of cooperation in nurturing young people for leadership. Both aspects should be kept in mind while preparing the youth for leadership while giving importance to specific requirements for leadership in a particular field.
The statement claimed in the previous paragraph can be exemplified by the discussion of the requirements of leadership in two fields of government and industry. While givernment mostly needs leaders with the high sense of cooperation, leading an industry requires a strong sense of competition. Running a government warrants keeping the various groups with conflict of interests satisfied so that they may contribute in the development of the country and refrain from works detrimental to the perceived national interests of the society and the nation. To achieve this goal, cooperation with diverse parties, groups and people is a must. However, industry leadership has the primary objective to run their industry in such a way that it thrives in the competitive market and continue to grow, perhaps often at the expense of the market rivals. Hence, intense sense of competition is an essential characteristics of the successful industry leaders, because failure to be competitve may lead to obsoleteness like Nokia to the cellphone rivals- Apple and Samsung.
Although, the two examples of government and industry clarify the initial statement, there are exception in both cases. For example, governments engage in rivalry with other governments. They may embroiled in civil wars in their own countries. These cases require competitve leaders. On the other hand, leading a strong and economically healthy company needs a vibrant management team who must be cooperative to keep the employees satisfied.
Therefore, it is evident that both the sense of cooperation and competition are integral parts of leadership for all fields. Although different fields require different modes of exercising leadership characteristics, preparing the youth of a scoiety for the future leadership position can be accomplished successfully by instilling both of the sense with informing their relative importance in different fields.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'characteristic'?
Suggestion: characteristic
...se sense of competition is an essential characteristics of the successful industry leaders, bec...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tilling both of the sense with informing their relative importance in different f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 383.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62402088773 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14169637618 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506527415144 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.2449036863 60.3974514979 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.625 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190449024575 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611924328917 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545837701507 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122024446054 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542655442935 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.1639044944 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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