The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry,
or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling
reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
A leader can be a true leader only by leading his team or subordinates from the front not by competing with them rather leading them from the front with mutual cooperation. The author states that to nurture a young person for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Though the statement may sound confusing and complicated to choose one quality over another for creation of an apt leader, but I agree with the author here because a person to be true leader should understand his subordinates or team by cooperating with them and working together as a team rather than treating them as opponents.
A leader is able to extract full potential from his team only when he know the nerve or emotion of his colleagues. This help him to lead his team to their goal by motivating them and making them realize their full potential. This could never be achieved if a leader or potential leader have a competitive behavior and treat his team to be his opponents. As, this will create a negative environment in the team and they will never be able to work with their full potential or in another way may work against each other.
It is also very important to note that cooperation between teammates creates mutual respect from each other. This creates a positive environment in the team which creates a helpful attitude among people and they are able to achieve their goal easily. If we take the example of a marketing team in a company, if the leader creates a competitive environment without any cooperation among teammates than they will never be able to reach their target, as in such a situation everyone will be competing attitude. But, if the leader is able to create a cooperative environment and let them understand the need of cooperation to reach their goals then they will not only be able to reach their individual goal but also due to cooperative environment will help any team members lacking in his/her field of work.
Some, may argue that a leader can only be born only when he has a competitive attitude to defeat all his opponent to be the ultimate leader. But, this may lead to achievement of his/her short term goal but in order to be great leader one should always cultivate a cooperative attitude. This will not only help in his growth but the overall growth of the company and his colleagues, which defines a true leader. In conclusion although a pinch of competitiveness is always important to push oneself to increase his/her potential but in case of a leader cooperation or working as team will always holds more importance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
...ll potential from his team only when he know the nerve or emotion of his colleagues....
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Line 7, column 595, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'hold'
Suggestion: hold
...peration or working as team will always holds more importance.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 456.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75877192982 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75353028948 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412280701754 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.5356713016 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.666666667 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4 23.4991977007 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0876824232445 0.243740707755 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479890467688 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093552959165 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0630677239905 0.150359130593 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645369418345 0.0667264976115 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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