The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry,
or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling
reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
I would strongly agree with this statement, however, I do not beleive that instilling the sense of cooperation would ready the youth for absolutely every field that they will encounter.
Although the statement exained is analog to a collectivist mindset whereby the whole is greater than the sum of the parts which harbours an inclusive perspective, sometimes, certain fields better thrive off of competition rather than cooperation. This may be akin to a culture having an individualist mindset, which would breed compeition, and thus bring out the best in all of the competing parties involved.
For example, when it comes to technology, it is better to have compeition between different coorperations. Competition breeds success and it also accelerates by which barriers are constantly sought after to be exceeded. If we look at the evolution of the smartphone over the last 20 years, we can see how rapidly compeition has morphed the old Nokia brick phones into the modern mini-computers that is an iPhone. In such instances, the youths of today who will be the future CEO of tomorrow would benefit from being challenged from a state of competition as well. The same can be said for sports and training for the olympics--our future olympians need to be able to handle the pressure of competing against opponents.
It is important to note, however the evidence presented does not mean to discourage or disparage the intention and the plausibility of the statment. Instead, the evidence brought forth is done in an effort to be hyper critical of a philosophy that tries to be applied in an all encompassing method; in certain instances, however, instilling a sense of cooperation, instead of competition, would be extremely advantageous. For example, when related to politics and political positions in government (e.g., leader of a party), a focus on cooperation (and consequently the laws/regulations/bills that come from it) is the benchmark for a healthy and proposerous nation due to the respect that would indirectly holds for each and every citizen.
In summary, although the statement under examination cannot be used in all ways, it is a well intentioned and otherwise intelligent method to adopt in situation specific fields. Cooperation is ideal when compeiting teams are striving towards a goal and this sort of competition is a healthy catalyst that promotes success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 372, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...peition, and thus bring out the best in all of the competing parties involved. For ex...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, e.g., however, if, look, may, so, still, thus, well, for example, in summary, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 384.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25520833333 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18846896867 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.9894183671 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.230769231 118.986275619 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5384615385 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 5.21951772744 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127484276574 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433641140449 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378510249586 0.0758088955206 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0721643870842 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395700682601 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.1392134831 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.82 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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