The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Young people are the future of a society. It is their leadership which determine the future prosperity or destruction of a society. Society is responsible for their upbringing and leadership building. So, it is the task of the society to enable them to lead the society in the future. The best way to perform it is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation over competition.

The usefulness of cooperation trumps competition in most cases. Cooperation leads the people to contribute more to the society. A single person can't complete a task faster than more person working in a cooperative way. Simple tasks can be completed more swiftly by competition as only one or small number of persons can handle that. But complex tasks need cooperation among people to complete them. In computer firms, there are many people working cooperatively to a single goal in mind: the progress of the company. If only one person established a company and competed with other companies for excellence, he couldn't have progressed far. Also, cooperation is a necessity in big projects. Such enormous projects can't be handled by a single or group of persons competing among themselves. But is everyone comes forward with a cooperative mindset, the work would get done more promptly and easily.

Another way cooperation helps in preaparing the youths in leading the society in future is it instills human virtues in them. When people work together, they can become empathetic to other's reasons, suffereings, happiness. Thus, cooperation can build a bridge among people, where competition brings antipathy, hate and contempt.

There are also a healthy aspect to the sense of cooperation. To be a better leader, our young people has be have healthy mind and body. When they are taught cooperation, they can be more relaxed, thus being more healthy. If they are always in competition with others, it brings a huge mental pressure on their minds, which can lead to chronic meantal disorder in future. Therefore, cooperation can ensure the sound mental health of our young generation.

Though there are so many usefulness of cooperation, one can argue that only with competition, a person gets out of his laid back approach, and bring the best out of him. Though it is true in a sense, the way of competition can take a high toll on a people. Competition to some extent is needed, but cooperation should be the main focus for the young people of our society.

If the society can build the character of the young people with a sense of cooperation rather than competition, the society will flourish in the future when today's youth takes leadership.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 145, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...te more to the society. A single person cant complete a task faster than more person...
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Line 3, column 198, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a cooperative way" with adverb for "cooperative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... a task faster than more person working in a cooperative way. Simple tasks can be completed more swi...
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Line 3, column 612, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...with other companies for excellence, he couldnt have progressed far. Also, cooperation ...
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Line 3, column 714, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...in big projects. Such enormous projects cant be handled by a single or group of pers...
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Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...e a better leader, our young people has be have healthy mind and body. When they a...
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Line 7, column 361, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ch can lead to chronic meantal disorder in future. Therefore, cooperation can ensure the ...
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Line 9, column 21, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun usefulness seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much usefulness', 'a good deal of usefulness'.
Suggestion: much usefulness; a good deal of usefulness
...oung generation. Though there are so many usefulness of cooperation, one can argue that only...
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Line 9, column 326, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...s needed, but cooperation should be the main focus for the young people of our society. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, therefore, thus, in most cases, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2201.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 440.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00227272727 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85322693202 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8186886751 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.5185185185 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2962962963 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.51851851852 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192351141481 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620604636077 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587364403253 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130203459723 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842284602314 0.0667264976115 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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