The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The author claims that to create leaders who would help humanity in sustainable development and guide humanity is not through competition but by cooperation. I agree to author's claim becausse of the below described cogent reasonings.
Firstly, leaders are the ones who manages the team, and when there is a quetion of whole team we certainly don't want someone who is onerous and thinks people as a ladder for his success. hence, If leaders are only having the sense of competition rather than cooperation than it would defeat the sole purpose of leader. leader guides the team and help them achieve success and understands that his success is when the team succeeds. The world have witnessed many leaders like Mahatama gandhi and Nelson Mandela, Mahatama gandhi was doing good in his life and was not a miser, but when he saw the situation of india, he left his luxurious life and performed each and every action to upleft the Indian population. If mahatama had thought about his loss of his valuable time and money which he spent in movements life non-violence and Satyagrah, and would have avoided the situation and settled in South Africa than he might not be having a title of "mahatama" and india still might be under opression of Britishers. Hence, leaders should be the who believe in united effort and united outcome rather than individual profit/loss.
Secondly, if all are moving in a direction of fighting a competition, even the leaders then, the world might end up in a complete chaos. The leaders need to run governments and industries and have other big responsibilites and each and every field requires different set of skills. Now, if leaders only feel the need to compete they might end up in achieving a skill which is not required in his field and would give his valuable time in thinking of ways to get better than that other person or firm.
Also, In today's world food and shelter are not the need of a man, its much more than that, like a vacation at disney land. As we see the needs are increasing and the resources are scarce, this creates the state of competition among living beings. we all not just humans all living beings compete in life, either for food or some other resources. only instilling the sense of cooperation might end up the firm or government being duped by other firms or governments. hence leaders should have both the qualitites, but in a appropriate proportion as much of anything is always detrimental.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, still, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83726415094 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70741465556 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521226415094 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8904988353 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.1875 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4375 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0864361844707 0.243740707755 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.029854659583 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.025568951623 0.0758088955206 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0554210594956 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212322409145 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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