The desire of corporations to maximize profits creates conflict with the general welfare of the nation at large
The author states the trade off of public welfare which arisis due to corporations agenda to maximize profits, which I strongly support. A corporation with sole agenda of maximizing profits would incontrovertibly lead to the trade off of general welfare of nation.
The desire to maximize the profits can be considered avarice of the companies which only thinks about profits and not about general welfare of the nation. it has been observed that one who gets greedy about anything tend to destroy itself and other around it, which is the case here with the companies. Further expounding we can take example of colonial rule, britishers when started to conquer the nations their sole priority was to just conquer and get as much they can extract from that nation even at the cost of humanity. In india when britishers invaded they not only suppressed Indian population for years and seperated them from their culture but they also pulverized them both internally and externally which led to ultimately down fall of india. these types of desires always leads to detrimental effects and hence ultimately degrades general welfare of the nation as we can see that once a country like india which was considered the "bird of gold" is now just a developing country with second highest population.
A very suitable example to justify the statement would be the companies producing cigrettes, tabacco and other toxic products which are legitimate in countries. The tabacco company unequivocally states that its products causes cancer, however they soley focus on their own profits and keep on producing such products at the cost of general welfare of nations. such products not only cause lethal diseases but also affects the nation's welfare at a huge cost. For example-these products are not regulated and are not monitered perusingly and hence there is no idea who is consuming these products, so youngsters which are considered the future of the nation might fall for this snarous product and get addicted and destroy their life and the ones who they are surrounded by, which ultimately comes as a great loss to nation.
The keyword here can be solely profit the companies if desires to not solely maximizing their profits then it is not right to say that the above statement is true.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, second, so, then, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 380.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05526315789 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62722139223 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510526315789 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.2524366055 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.083333333 118.986275619 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6666666667 23.4991977007 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281342170124 0.243740707755 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123383422496 0.0831039109588 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107249082207 0.0758088955206 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187139679251 0.150359130593 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653888986778 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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