The following recommendation appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy—and generate additional tax revenues—is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The mayor of Hopewell proposes a new strategy to increase the revenue and generate additional taxes. The proposal is Hopewell shall also build a golf course and resort hotel as in Ocean View keeping in mind the their(Ocean view) success. I disagree to this contention and believe that this proposal might not be the successful in fulfilling its target.
The mayor makes an unwarranted assumption that this proposal would have same effect as it had in Ocean View's town. I find this baseless. There is no evidence that the Hopewell and Ocean View shares identical features and hence, what might attracted the tourists could be the ambience and bucolic environment of Ocean View. Also, apart from golf course, there might be some other tourist attraction at Ocean View and hence, people would certainly prefer Ocean View rather than Hopewell's resort.
Additionally, there is no guarantee that new businesses would certainly open and would help Hopewell's economy to burgeon. It might happen that government spend hefty amount over resort and golf course but, due to some reason like, government's stringent policies, businessman might not be interested in opening their branch at Hopewell. This might push government further into misery.
Also, the mayor without any analysis assumed that tourism will increase and so would revenue. But there are many factors affecting growth of tourism. If say people are only attracted to golf course and resort, but this case also might not be sufficient that tourist would proliferate. There are myriad of reasons like proper transportation facilities and congenial enviroment which affect tourists. If the Hopewell is not having congenial environment and there is a near constant storms, then the point of golf course would certainly be futile.
Moreover, even if this recommendation attracts tourists there is no guarantee that it will attract tantamount tourists to atleast compensate the construction effort of the government. It might happen that meager tourists are attracted and hence less revenue is generated. This revenue might be too less that it fails to even compensate the construction money and pushes the economy further down.
In sum, because of mayor's unwarranted assumptions and lack of evidence this recommendation turns out to be baseless. Just by assuming that it worked for one would certitudely work for the other is deleterious.For implementing this proposal one would require more profound analysis into the matter.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 393 350
No. of Characters: 2047 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.452 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.209 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.703 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.65 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.552 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.57 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 481, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'storm'?
Suggestion: storm
...nvironment and there is a near constant storms, then the point of golf course would ce...
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Line 11, column 210, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...udely work for the other is deleterious.For implementing this proposal one would re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 392.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34693877551 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76810988219 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512755102041 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7309124153 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.8 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15 5.70786347227 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177807429172 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581002230165 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713072402349 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949406217388 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082709671322 0.0628817314937 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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