The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
leadership is not a congenital trace in a human being, but it is inculcated within a person by practicing several things and imbibing positive elements from the environment. Leaders are demanded currently by any industry in the world. The best practical way to develop such personalities are not through competition, but by evoking the sense of leadership by instilling cooperation among the mates. I definitely go against the topic which is given in the question due to several reasons and relevant practical situations in the society.
Firstly, the competition makes the person blind and the ultimate aim of his thriving in an industry or any community becomes inane. Thereby, he or she might resort to an egregious situation to win any situation. To exemplify, a person, especially in an it industry, always thrives to be the best among the team. And if the team manager sparks more competitive nature among them rather than cooperation between them might lead to quarrels or some ill situation. The whole idea of leadership will destroy at this point and the game becomes more combative. if the team manager has supported the team members and pushes them to be more cooperative, might have resulted in knowing the leadership. Thus, this example illustrates to promote the learning of leadership through cooperation rather than competition.
Secondly, cooperation rewards more than what we expect. cooperation will definitely open up the qualities among the team members which is required for one's leadership. To illustrate, the two teams in a corporate environment with two basic different notions, on which they work - cooperation and competition. The team with competition as their idea will not reach anywhere, rather they will end up in different ideas of executing the task. Whereas the people who follow the idea of cooperation reaches a better place of stance and they cultivate more teamwork, understanding among the teammates, confidence and several other qualities. this clearly explains how such combative nature among the teammates can destroy the value of leadership.
In a nutshell, the leadership qualities should not be elicited by compulsion or putting the mates in a race, rather put them in a harmonious environment where they can think, discuss and cooperate with each other. this applies not only to one industry, but all including government, cooperate, sports and so on.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 384.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28125 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96833232564 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544270833333 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0300207638 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.736842105 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2105263158 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52631578947 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154506022316 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452727624209 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483346698633 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913402855588 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.013897244786 0.0667264976115 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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