The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The best way to prepare the young generation for their inevitable challenges is a hotly debated topic, with fervent supporters of disparate methods present in all sides. The statement above states that the best way to prepare is through cooperation. While competition does have its merits, I firmly believe that cooperation is the only way to achieve a better society.
First of all we have to take a look at the fruits of a proper competition. Without it we would not get a high achieving student or a studious employee. In absence of competition, there would not have been a driving force for students or emplyees to perform better. Furthermore, we cannot ignore that some people perform better when they are working alone. Perhaps involvement of other people causes a distraction, or they cannot come to terms with the opinions of other people, regardless they just perform better solo.
However, while for nuclear projects one person may be able to get the job done. But what about macro scale projects, like running a government or a multinational company, surely they cannot be operated by a single person. There will always be influential people who will get the attention, people like Barack Obama, Bill Gates, but Bill Gates alone did not run microsoft. Every leader has a team of diverse individuals working either for or with them, so that an organization or country can run smoothly. Bill Gates did not compete with his fellow emplyees to make microsoft what it is today, rather he cooperated with them to ensure that microsoft were producing the best software possible.
Furthermore, one cannot ignore the sense of brotherhood and unionship that can be formed by working together. When you are in a state of constant competition, it can mean many lonely hours of tiresome work. While working together means that one can share the burden of responsibility and also have some fun while you are at it. Also there are some problems which may to be detected by a single person. For example if a person is designing a software, there could have been bugs within the software that can elude a single eye. But if a group is working at it then surely that bug could be detected by someone working in that group.
Overall, competition is required for self development at an early stage or perhaps even when working in micro projects. But whenever we face gigantic projects or problems, single individuals working separately is not a pragmatic solution. Many minds working together can garner fruitfull result while also becoming less stressful for a single individual. So cooperation is the only way forward.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 329, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...also have some fun while you are at it. Also there are some problems which may to be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, then, while, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2191.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 441.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96825396825 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72334562466 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.1680490599 60.3974514979 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.2608695652 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1739130435 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21739130435 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173770429318 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488557607988 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367327795049 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0947754557194 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406815742256 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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