"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Young leadership in government, business and industry is always a hot button topic. Government policies favors the young mind's eagerness, energy and dedication for positive upliftment of society. Very famous story of childhood came to my mind, that a single stick can be broken with less effort, but if their is a bunch of wooden sticks then it is difficult to break them. Thus, giving us a lesson that if we work in a team with cooperation it is hard to break us and we can achieve to our goal.
This topic brought a thought about Independence of India, when Mahatma Gandhi used his young mind to fight against Britishers. He was spearhead of many movements, but he knew that alone he cannot fight against all the Bristishers and thus he used sense of cooperation and launched various movements with thousands of India taking part in them and together fighting against Britishers, which eventually lead to success of Indians in 1947.
Young mind always try to do extreme experimentation instead of going with conventional methods. This might lead to some success that was never thought of, but team work is required for support if the experiment fails or for the proper guidance. For instance, Indian space mission of Mars was thought as one of the impossible mission, as it was allocated only 400 crores of budget that is equivalent to hollywood movie like Interstellar budget. But with young mind, proper leadership and team cooperation the mission was made successful.
Young leadership depends on how youth of the country is been taught and trained at their early age in school or outside school . For instance, Every year thousands of students attempt IIT-JEE entrance examination, they enter this competitive world at an early age of 17 or 18 years. They are instilled with a sense of that world is a competitive playground. If you want to make achieve success, you need to fight in this battle with your peers and climb the ladder of success.Such environment instill a sense of competition among youth and they think in life to achieve any success you need to be competitive.
To essence, I wrote about the examples where sense of cooperation under youth leadership helped to achieve success that might have been thought impossible. In contrast, some reasons that challenge this position are also presented. It depends on how the world of industry, government and other fields are introduced to the youth. If it is shown as indiviuals success, then youth becomes competitive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: minds'; mind's
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... can be broken with less effort, but if their is a bunch of wooden sticks then it is ...
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...ts attempt IIT-JEE entrance examination, they enter this competitive world at an ...
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Suggestion: instills
... the ladder of success.Such environment instill a sense of competition among youth and ...
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..., then youth becomes competitive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, then, thus, for instance, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2094.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00956937799 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7813052387 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540669856459 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7475099108 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.333333333 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2222222222 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14739614095 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448317408567 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317515783748 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.073734312137 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225545876003 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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