The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
To be a successful leader one must possess qualities of teamwork, shrewdness and selflessness. The author claims that to prepare the youth for leadership roles in any field they should be taught how to cooperate instead of compete. However, I believe that a right balance of both is necessary to raise successful leaders.
To begin with, in almost every field we require someone who can guide us. For example, consider an IT company. There we have managers and senior leaders who manage their teams and strive for them to be successful. A manager's quotidian job asks for communicating with people on a regular basis. If the manager is apathetic or hostile towards people then this might cause resentment among people and affect the quality of work in a negative way. Hence, the qualities of teamwork and cooperation will be imperative for a manager to be successful.
In constrast, teaching young children to be competitive is also equally important. With increasing population, being distinct from someone has become challenging. For instance, consider the country India where lakhs of students appear for an examination for admission into the nation's prestigious institutes such as the IITs. Since, there are only a couple thousand seats available, if the students are not competitive or significantly better from other students, then they might not be able to score well in the exam. Therefore, instilling a sense of competition among young people is necessary so that they can increase there efforts and work harder to be successful.
However, in my view a combination of both would bring the best out of the young ones. For example, in a classroom, if students are taught to be the best along with helping each other, then this would not only make them proficient in what they do but also make them realise the importance of helping other people. As being a leader involves understanding the challenges of the group that he's leading and solving them, an incisive individual with magnanimous personality would, no doubt, prove to be the best leader.
All in all, I disagree with the author's claim that only instilling a sense of cooperation and not competition among the youth will help them to achieve success as leaders. On the other hand, I think that young children should be taught both the qualities to shape them as leaders in any field.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 97, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
...who can guide us. For example, consider an IT company. There we have managers and sen...
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Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
...n guide us. For example, consider an IT company. There we have managers and senior lead...
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Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A manager' or simply 'managers'?
Suggestion: A manager; Managers
...s and strive for them to be successful. A managers quotidian job asks for communicating wi...
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Line 5, column 426, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...g people and affect the quality of work in a negative way. Hence, the qualities of teamwork and c...
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Line 9, column 358, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a thousand'.
Suggestion: a thousand
...he IITs. Since, there are only a couple thousand seats available, if the students are no...
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Line 13, column 388, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: he's
...anding the challenges of the group that hes leading and solving them, an incisive i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, no doubt, such as, in my view, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 393.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02798982188 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79975006816 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526717557252 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1763315742 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.777777778 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.11111111111 5.21951772744 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181118761263 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06039307629 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370751531946 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107384201533 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0184918630831 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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