Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
In today's world, population is increasing at a dramatic rate. To find a place to live and gather more resources for utilization humans are progressively intruding into natural habitat of animals and plants. Although it is necessary to expand into these natural areas to support the increasing population, it is now more critical to protect the wilderness areas so as to not disturb their natural state. Nations should therefore enact strict laws to ensure that these natural areas are preserved.
As population grows, people need houses to live. And due to urbanization, even more forests are cleared to construct new houses and buildings. As a result the ecosystem of that area is negatively affected. Moreover with industrialization, a plethora of new manufacturing plants are constructed which get most of their raw materials from forests and discard the chemical wastes into rivers. This has deleterious affects on the native flora and fauna of that region.
There are many instances when wildlife, due to destruction of their natural habitat, has resorted to cities in search of food and has attacked humans. Also due to human activity many species have become extinct while many more are endangered. Moreover, due to deforestation the amount of carbon dioxide is increasing in the atmosphere, a prominent factor which leads to global warming.
An urgent need is to ameliorate the situation and take preventive measures to protect the nature. This would have many positive affects. First and foremost, wild animals would not come to cites and urban areas if their natural habitat is not disturbed. This would result in a perfect balance between the humans and the wildlife. Secondly, laws against deforestation will ensure that cutting of forests is regulated and there would be no detrimental impact to the environment due to over-cutting. Soil erosion and global warming would be significantly reduced. Strict laws against industries which dump harmful chemicals into water bodies will help to ensure that water bodies like rivers and oceans are not polluted and aquatic animals are not affected.
It can be unequivocally concluded that it is necessary to protect the nature to ensure sustainable development. And the best way to do that is for the countries to make laws to protect environment and implement them strictly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 362, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ritical to protect the wilderness areas so as to not disturb their natural state. Nation...
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Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to construct new houses and buildings. As a result the ecosystem of that area is ...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...em of that area is negatively affected. Moreover with industrialization, a plethora of n...
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Line 9, column 152, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...search of food and has attacked humans. Also due to human activity many species have...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 374.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28609625668 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90517711127 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534759358289 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.8021357344 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1428571429 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8095238095 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04761904762 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184149870509 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049260294876 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056863798372 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0966052403076 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668605921288 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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