The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

The statement suggests that to give young people a sense of leadership in government or other fields, we should emphasize the importance of cooperation rather than the one of competition. However, the writer's opinion is too extreme and the writer fails to consider the benefits of competition. So I strongly believe that both cooperation and competition are necessary for providing leadership to potential rulers.

Being cooperative with different fields of people is very essential nowadays since the world is full of uncertainties and possibilities so that to have only a certain field of knowledge is insufficient to deal with everyday tasks people would encounter. Only by cooperating with colleagues or alliances will a company or a nation thrive.

Competition, on the other hand, might be harmful to corporations or governments. Take the Cold War as an example, both the U.S. and the USSR are the two most powerful countries in the world at that time. Nevertheless, instead of cooperating, they build tons of missiles, nuclear weapons to threaten each other. If the USSR has not chosen to do the meaningless competition, it might have existed without being bankrupted. I believe that sometimes unnecessary competition between corporations or nations may be bad for human or society development.

I concede, sometimes a little competition is necessary for making progress. Without any sense of competition, a company or a country may grow complacent and cannot detect possible risks at the most peaceful time.

To sum up, I think cooperation and competition are both essential for leaders to have a sense of them. By incorporating both cooperation and competition, a leader will know how to adapt to the changing environment by consulting with different fields of experts and will not be too complacent when operating his/her company or nation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...an the one of competition. However, the writers opinion is too extreme and the writer f...
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Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... knowledge is insufficient to deal with everyday tasks people would encounter. Only by c...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, nevertheless, so, i think, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 295.0 442.535393258 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29830508475 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20509146805 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559322033898 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6265239248 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.642857143 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21220507409 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702139844717 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500808397338 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114090424878 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425579701455 0.0667264976115 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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