The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position. (25 times)
Many world leaders agree with the statement “Cooperation and competition are the two faces of a coin and they won’t leave one another”. Here the prompt suggests the most efficient way to prepare our youngsters for leadership in the government, industry or other fields is by teaching them to value cooperation than the competition. For a young people to become a great leader he or she must understand the vital roles of cooperation and competition and should utilize them whenever the situation demands. I believe that we should teach both cooperation and competition attitudes to our youths. In the following two paragraphs I will explain why it is maintain a balance between competition and cooperation.
First of all, I should appreciate the author to considering in developing the youths to become leaders from their young age. Cooperation teaches youngsters on the values of team spirit, how to be a team player?, patience, and so on. For example, my nephew school teaches him the social values, helping each other, how to become successful by working together as a group and these insights on cooperation helps him to understand the real world problems and all he talks about becoming a mayor and building a corruption less city. So if an individual starts working in an industry, government job or in any other field has the basic knowledge of cooperation and then he/she will definitely thrive towards success and their management will offer them the role of leadership within no time.
Secondly, completion is very much necessary for the growth of an individual or group. So it is the responsibility of the leaders to make their peers to be competent in the world full of competition . If a leader without any prior knowledge of completion will definitely loose in the virtual race of success. For example, Nokia mobile phone company is a very good example on why it is to be competent in the ever changing world, they had the best mobile selling business all over the world but they failed even though they were very cooperative to their customer. The only reason for their failure is they are not competent enough to innovate on new technologies. In this way we can understand that completion is also very much essential in shaping a leader form their young age.
To conclude, necessary steps to be taken by schools, parents and government to teach youngsters to understand the value of cooperation and competition and why they go hand in hand and both are the essential ingredients in shaping a leader.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'maintained'.
Suggestion: maintained
...two paragraphs I will explain why it is maintain a balance between competition and coope...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rit, how to be a team player?, patience, and so on. For example, my nephew school...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...mpetent in the world full of competition . If a leader without any prior knowledge...
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Line 9, column 202, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tent in the world full of competition . If a leader without any prior knowledge of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 425.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95115145206 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512941176471 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.0442659274 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.8125 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5625 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132856016371 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464703123328 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555753408526 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0744942678883 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544105708551 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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