The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position

Alone, we can walk fast. Together, we can go far. This basic principle of life applies to everyone, especially leaders. In order to breed leaders that can make huge strides in industry and government, society must train its young people by instilling a spirit of cooperation, rather than competition for the following reasons:

The major tasks of a leader are completed through constant communication. For a leader to communicate effectively and smoothly, he needs to adopt a spirit of camarederie. For example, leaders in government and industry are usually in a hierarchy. A leader has to communicate not only to those above and below him in the ladder, but also those at the same level as he is on. It will be easier to relate with them with a sense of cooperation rather than competition.

For a leader in high governmental positions, a spirit of cooperation makes it easy for leaders to relate to leaders of other societies. Many international organisations such as the World Trade Organization, the European Union and the African Union which have improved the economies of their members a great deal are based on a spirit of cooperation. A leader who views everyone else as a competition will find it difficult to improve the economic position of his country, when he shies away from such unions.

Similarly, a leader in industry and business would also benefit greatly from an attitude of cooperation than competition. Despite the highly acclaimed benefits of 'perfect competition' in a capitalist society, pragmatic experiences show the benefits of cooperating: companies benefit from economies of scale when they cooperate and site their companies near to each other, mobile phone producers benefit when they use the same technology adopted by their competitors, and so on. Thesebenefit not only the companies themselves, but the society as a whole when all companies in an industry produce optimally and efficiently.

However, proponents of a competitive society will argue that competition breeds effectiveness. This however is not enough of an excuse to imbue future leaders with behaviours as hate, hoarding, desperation, envy amongst other vices which come along with a competitive spirit; behaviours that can slow down the trajectory of any society that wishes to progress. Thus, therefore imbibing a sense of cooperation in young people will serve a society far better than instilling a sense of competition.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, similarly, so, still, therefore, thus, as to, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 390.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24358974359 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09217268064 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.7269276838 60.3974514979 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.294117647 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9411764706 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29411764706 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214206299629 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680243073913 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0579615952773 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119515334264 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477568032187 0.0667264976115 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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