The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
No human being in this planet is perfect. Everybody makes mistakes. The important thing is to learn from one’s mistakes. That is what makes one not to repeat the same mistake again, and ultimately be better than their previous selves. The best way to teach, in my opinion, is to criticize the negative actions that one makes, and praise the positive ones. According to me, criticizing negative actions is more important than praising positive ones.
One cannot be a better person if they don’t know that their actions affect others in a negative way. Only if that is pointed out, they can understand their mistakes and not repeat it in the future. For instance, a singer performing in a foreign country may think that it might be good if they wore that country’s traditional clothes. But, the people of that country might find that as cultural appropriation, and be offended by it. If this is not pointed out to the singer, then they might wear the same type of outfit when they’re performing in that country the next time. For the singer to not repeat this mistake again, this action must be criticized.
If one is only praised for their positive actions and not punished or criticized for their negative ones, then they might think that they can do whatever they want, and not be affected by it. Take for example, a Youtube star named Logan Paul. He was one of the fastest growing Youtube channels in the world, gaining around 1.2 million subscribers a month. His fan base is predominantly children of the age 9 to 13. He has performed many distasteful actions, like pretending to getting shot in front of his young, impressionable audience, behaving rudely to people in the street, and disrespecting the people of Japan and their culture when he visited the country. People have criticized him for these actions, but Youtube didn’t. The most infamous one is that he filmed a dead body in a suicide forest on his recent trip to Japan. This insensitive action sparked massive outrage and a plethora of people condemning his action, which finally led to him deleting the video, and issuing an apology. He said that his intent was to educate people about suicide and suicide prevention, but his actions didn’t convey this message. The next video which he posted was about suicide prevention, and it got postive reviews from the internet community. So , it seems like he learnt from his mistakes, which made him a better person.
To be a better person, one has to learn from their mistakes. To facillitate this, their mistakes has to be pointed out first. Hence, praising positive actions and ignoring negative ones is not the best way to teach. The negative actions of a person has to be criticized.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 362, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...ne makes, and praise the positive ones. According to me, criticizing negative actions is more i...
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Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...t know that their actions affect others in a negative way. Only if that is pointed out, they can ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... reviews from the internet community. So , it seems like he learnt from his mistak...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, may, so, then, as to, for example, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 467.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8608137045 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64963812988 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47965738758 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.995741695 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0740740741 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2962962963 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.48148148148 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 5.13820224719 292% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143943251496 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499543349743 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795148638428 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109025888251 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468492155679 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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