“A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.”
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
A person has a better chance to be successful (good position economically, more happier) in life if they enjoy doing what they like. A student would be more interested in the subjects that he/she enjoys learning about. It would not be beneficial for a student to learn about something in which they have absolutely no interest, unless it is a basic necessity for the area in which the student is interested in. So, a student should be able to choose their own curriculum.
Suppose in a nation, the curriculum till college is same for all of its students. Lets say that the curriculum focusses heavily on math and science and art is ignored. This is not useful for a student who is interested in art and wishes to have a carreer in art. So, the number of people pursuing art as an carrer might be very low for that country. The opportunities for artists might also be very low. So, parents might compel their children who're interested in art, to focus on math and science. These students might not be able to perform well because of the lack of interest in math and science. Hence, their future career in math and science might be bleak. Instead, if they focussed on art, they might have had an excellent career as an artist. Hence, having the same national curriculum is highly disadvantageous in this situation.
In contrast to this, if the nation wide curriculum is well developed such that all the fields are focussed more or less equally, then the students can have a taste of all the different fields, and might find the ones in which they are deeply interested. This might lead the students to find new, interesting fields in which they previously thought they had no interest. This might lead to more opportunities for the students. Hence, in this scenario, having the same curriculum for the whole country might be advantageous.
However, in my opinion, nation-wide curriculum is more disadvantageous than it is advantageous. The primary reason for this belief is that it is very difficult and highly unlikely for a nation to have a great nation-wide curriculum. This makes the scenario discussed in paragraph two more likely to happen than that in paragraph three. Hence, it might discourage students to follow their heart.
In conclusion, having a nation-wide curriculum would most likely be disadvantageous; a student should be able to decide their own curriculum.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 75, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: happier
... successful good position economically, more happier in life if they enjoy doing what they l...
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Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ollege is same for all of its students. Lets say that the curriculum focusses heavil...
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Line 3, column 305, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...o, the number of people pursuing art as an carrer might be very low for that count...
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Line 5, column 29, Rule ID: NATION_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nationwide'?
Suggestion: nationwide
...tuation. In contrast to this, if the nation wide curriculum is well developed such that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, so, then, well, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to, in my opinion, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 406.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87684729064 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82287931473 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443349753695 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 613.8 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.8189384086 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0869565217 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.652173913 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91304347826 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195294346171 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698032615817 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585784226741 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130590526976 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187611369208 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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