Claim: An action is morally correct if the amount of good that results from the action is greater than the amount of bad that results from the action.
Reason: When assessing the morality of an action, the results of an action are more important than the intent of the person or people performing that action.
The claim is that an action is morally correct if the amount of good that results from the action is greater than the amount of bad that results from the action, Reason behind this claim is that when assessing the mortality of an action, the results of the action are more important of the person or people performing the action. Claim adn reason behind the claim is suggest uncertainn result as a general case. I do not agree with the claim and even with the reason behind it.
First of all, It is stated that result of any action deciedes wheather this action was morally correct or not, Another way you can say result of action is more important than intention behind the action. It contradicts every aspect of daily life, our culture values and even common sense. Take an example of One person who decided to go in crowded place and would shoot one random person, Now by chacne the person who went to market with intention to kill on innocent and by chance killed the most wanted terrorist,Now what will you say, is he morally correct? The result has definitely more good than bad. Even if someone support the person who by chance killed terrorist and declare it as a morally correct, Then it might be possible that same person again try to kill innocent person and next time he might be succesful in killing the innocent one. So if now someone declare it as a morally incoorect than there is no point, As we could save one's life if we first time declared it as a morally incorrect and sent him to jail. There are myraid these kind of examples, So It would be not appropriate to declare act morally correct or incorrect on the basis of the result of the action.
Secondly, The person whose intention is always right does not mean that all action of that person results in a good. Consider normal life example, Many of the students study with sincere hardwork and good intention to get good marks in exam, But sometimes they would not get it. On the other side sometimes by chance student who are careless about study got good marks. Now in these example we can see that there could be case that good intention or hardwork may not provide desired result. Same if you will consider the example of social worker who tries to help the needy people, And serve them food , and that food some ingredient. Now one of the needy person has an problem with that ingredient and some how because of it that perosn die then the result of social worker's action is obviously bad but it does not mean that he was morally wrong as whatever he had done, all with expecting good result for need people.
In sum, Results of any action is not fully controlled by human. What human can control is their intention so it would be more appropriate to decide action on the basis of intention rather than the result of action.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 368, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'suggested'.
Suggestion: suggested
...n. Claim adn reason behind the claim is suggest uncertainn result as a general case. I ...
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Line 3, column 515, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Now
... chance killed the most wanted terrorist,Now what will you say, is he morally correc...
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Line 3, column 871, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'declares'.
Suggestion: declares
...ing the innocent one. So if now someone declare it as a morally incoorect than there is...
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Line 3, column 946, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...han there is no point, As we could save ones life if we first time declared it as a ...
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Line 3, column 1047, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
... and sent him to jail. There are myraid these kind of examples, So It would be not appropr...
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Line 3, column 1053, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'kinds'?
Suggestion: kinds
...ent him to jail. There are myraid these kind of examples, So It would be not appropr...
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Line 5, column 602, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...lp the needy people, And serve them food , and that food some ingredient. Now one ...
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Line 5, column 668, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...edient. Now one of the needy person has an problem with that ingredient and some h...
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Line 5, column 704, Rule ID: SOME_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'somehow'?
Suggestion: somehow
...has an problem with that ingredient and some how because of it that perosn die then the ...
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Line 5, column 769, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
...at perosn die then the result of social workers action is obviously bad but it does not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2300.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 511.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50097847358 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21566687196 2.79657885939 79% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.759053309 60.3974514979 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.777777778 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3888888889 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.517628215592 0.243740707755 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172712959627 0.0831039109588 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.208956157087 0.0758088955206 276% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.372552459937 0.150359130593 248% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.200286835459 0.0667264976115 300% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.1743820225 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.12 12.1639044944 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.