Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
As the education system is developing,students are motivated to pursue their passion rather than following other people. Students are thought in schools and from their parents to follow their dream and this is the right thing to do rather than doing more worthy job in which that student has no interest. If something is done with enthusiasm then the there are more chances to be successful and people can do something with enthusiasm only if they have passion in doing that.
When sachin tendulkar was in 10th grade he failed in exams. If at that time his parents would have thought that he cannot do the worthy job because he is not good in studies then he would have not been in the position he is today. His parents supported his dreams of becoming a cricketer and now he is one of the most famous batsman in the world. He is called the god of cricket world.
Similar is the case of lata mangeshkar,one of the most famous singers worldwide.with her euphony voice she won the heart of many people around the globe. If she had been forced to do what other people are doing then we would not have songs like vande matram.she pursued her dream and now she is the queen of singing world.Her age in 105 and still one of the greatest singers born.
The King of bollywood shahrukh khan is the actor who is liked by most of us not only in india but worldwide. He is called the king of romance and is one of the most rich and fine actors around the world. If he would have thought to become a doctor or an engineer he may not have been this successful he is today and we would have missed his impeccable acting in movies like my name is khan,kal ho na ho etc.
If the above famous personalities would have thought that the would go with the flow and become what everyone is blindly following they may not have been that successful they are now and would not stand out of million of faces in the world. so people should follow their passion rather then blindly following others. People can be most successful if they have a passion about their vocation because they will like doing that with utter enthusiasm and will give their 100 percent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , students
As the education system is developing,students are motivated to pursue their passion r...
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... if they have passion in doing that. When sachin tendulkar was in 10th grade he f...
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Message: Did you mean 'had thought'?
Suggestion: had thought
...d in exams. If at that time his parents would have thought that he cannot do the worthy job becaus...
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... Similar is the case of lata mangeshkar,one of the most famous singers worldwide.wi...
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Suggestion: Her
...d now she is the queen of singing world.Her age in 105 and still one of the greates...
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Message: Did you mean 'had thought'?
Suggestion: had thought
...and fine actors around the world. If he would have thought to become a doctor or an engineer he ma...
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Suggestion: , kal
...le acting in movies like my name is khan,kal ho na ho etc. If the above famous pe...
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Message: Did you mean 'had thought'?
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...c. If the above famous personalities would have thought that the would go with the flow and bec...
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Suggestion: So
...d out of million of faces in the world. so people should follow their passion rath...
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Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...ople should follow their passion rather then blindly following others. People can be...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.209638554217 0.240241500013 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.2 0.157235817809 127% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0578313253012 0.0880659088768 66% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0674698795181 0.0497285424764 136% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0843373493976 0.0444667217837 190% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.132530120482 0.12292977631 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0650602409639 0.0406280797675 160% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.37773972239 2.79330140395 85% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0168674698795 0.030933414821 55% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0819277108434 0.0997080785238 82% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0385542168675 0.0249443105267 155% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0120481927711 0.0148568991511 81% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2142.0 2732.02544248 78% => OK
No of words: 393.0 452.878318584 87% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45038167939 6.0361032391 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.277353689567 0.366273622748 76% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.173027989822 0.280924506359 62% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0941475826972 0.200843997647 47% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0687022900763 0.132149295362 52% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37773972239 2.79330140395 85% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 219.290929204 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450381679389 0.48968727796 92% => OK
Word variations: 47.6633975845 55.4138127331 86% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6194690265 73% => OK
Sentence length: 26.2 23.380412469 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3123390792 59.4972553346 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.8 141.124799967 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2 23.380412469 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.466666666667 0.674092028746 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.21349557522 192% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 43.5027989822 51.4728631049 85% => OK
Elegance: 1.15753424658 1.64882698954 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130241853871 0.391690518653 33% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.191720881963 0.123202303941 156% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0855225935986 0.077325440228 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.620976180078 0.547984918172 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.136999194732 0.149214159877 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065102952613 0.161403998019 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381735059788 0.0892212321368 43% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.307496588171 0.385218514788 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0588128713947 0.0692045440612 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912259502007 0.275328986314 33% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414100649537 0.0653680567796 63% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88274336283 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
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It is not right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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