Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
The claim on putting emphasis on picking worthy goals rather then just colloquely advising the young people to "follow their dreams" does entail merit.
The fledglings often naive, do not have any depictions of the real world and there dreams are solely driven by their close surrounding ---Parents, TV, Internet, neighbors-- The first thing a child sees and looks up to are their parents (very first role model in their lives) or are at best spellbound with movies and wants to be an actor/ become an astraunaut. It doesn't mean these are not viable options, however, the feasibility of the same needs some work and testing.
If the posterity were to start to blindly follow their dreams, our economy would go for a toss. One cannot imagine oneself to be CA or dreams to work in an IT firm, not denying they cannot be but the probability of that happening is quiet less, since, the young at that point wouldn't even understand what these terms mean, let alone work for/help solve one.
Guidance and course correction plays a key role in lives of the children. For example, a Superman fanboy wants to become a superhero , though not practical we can help the child put right thoughts about what a superhero really means-- helping the needed, champion the rights for the minority,humble -- are all traits that will help them become a real superhero.
Not denying that the advice "follow your dreams" does not has any merit at all. This brings in the children a sense of independence and freedom -- you can be whatever you want to, do anything once you start working towards it -- As once rightly said "if you working on something you love and are passionate about, you wouldn't be working but playing around all your life". Sense of responsibility is instilled.
With that said, there always are various directions you would want to take to help the children prosper in there lives but a general idea is to guide them through their journey, correcting there course along the way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 62, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...emphasis on picking worthy goals rather then just colloquely advising the young peop...
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Line 3, column 363, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...o be an actor/ become an astraunaut. It doesnt mean these are not viable options, howe...
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Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
...e oneself to be CA or dreams to work in an IT firm, not denying they cannot be but th...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'firms'?
Suggestion: firms
...elf to be CA or dreams to work in an IT firm, not denying they cannot be but the pro...
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Line 5, column 277, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...et less, since, the young at that point wouldnt even understand what these terms mean, ...
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Line 7, column 133, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...erman fanboy wants to become a superhero , though not practical we can help the ch...
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Line 7, column 292, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , humble
...ed, champion the rights for the minority,humble -- are all traits that will help them b...
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Line 9, column 69, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'have'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: have
...'follow your dreams' does not has any merit at all. This brings in the ch...
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Line 9, column 69, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...'follow your dreams' does not has any merit at all. This brings in the ch...
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Line 9, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the children a sense of independence and freedom -- you can be whatever you want ...
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Line 9, column 335, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... you love and are passionate about, you wouldnt be working but playing around all your ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, really, so, still, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 341.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90909090909 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60121956113 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598240469208 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.805603441 60.3974514979 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.181818182 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 23.4991977007 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208496785926 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827279491059 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119541643234 0.0758088955206 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110441982064 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126142956303 0.0667264976115 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.