Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
It is debatable whether a lot of problems in this day and age is not resolved by laws and the legal system since people's minds are immutable by laws. Although this claim seems axiomatic, vice versa is more frequently observed in modern society.
To begin with, it is evident that laws and the legal system prevent a myriad of problems of present days. Punishments and penalties foster people to transform their thoughts in a way that is more conducive to creating a better society. From little incidents as parking ticket to serious illicit acts as murder and kidnap, people monitor their thoughts and constrain their acts. It is natural for a human being to want to murder someone out of deep hatred and revenge purpose, but laws preclude a lot of crimes because people do not want to pay for their misdemeanor, and laws and legal systems clearly state that detriments will be imposed on outlaws. Laws and the legal systems are one of the most effective means to keep people from going against their conscientious and morality.
Moreover, passing of a law actually does change people's perspectives with the inherent authoritative power the law possesses. Women's suffrage and gay marriage, once deemed almost as a taboo or maladaptive culture, received new identity after the passing of the laws contingent to them. Through transformation of the legal system, people of unspoken became able to raise their voices with much less fear; in fact, those people influence heavily upon current societies to be more open and free to discuss what was under harsh criticism, or oppression. Modification of laws have evidently changed people's minds in ways that are helpful in amelioration of a society.
Admittedly, laws and legal systems can look rigid and are of no help in advancing modern sociey. However, this is a very narrow-minded view that only focuses what is on the surface level such as punishments and penalties. Laws may not change humans's most instinct and innate vile, but legal systems do their jobs in modifyin people's hearts to be more adaptive and healthy; without them, the societies will become chaotic.
All in all, I disagree with the given statement because of the aforementioned reasons. A lot of rights that are taken for granted are solidly protected by laws and legal systems. Undermining their roles is underestimating what human's natural selfish desires and vicious hearts can bring about. Laws are changing our hearts sufficiently so that our immoral hearts not revealed completely, which would have made current societies into a complete chaos.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Admittedly, laws and legal systems can look rigid and are of no help in advancing modern sociey.
Error: sociey Suggestion: society
Sentence: Laws may not change humans's most instinct and innate vile, but legal systems do their jobs in modifyin people's hearts to be more adaptive and healthy; without them, the societies will become chaotic.
Error: modifyin Suggestion: modifying
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arguments: OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2109 1500
No. of Different Words: 237 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.962 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.646 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.611 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.488 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.059 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2157.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 425.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07529411765 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70143265848 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5549682842 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.833333333 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6111111111 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306021395924 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945167530701 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507004136079 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171279778862 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186372022524 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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