Claim: Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed. Reason: It is inappropriate—and, perhaps, even cruel—to use public resources to fund the arts when people's basic needs are not being met
Stating that nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed, this view asserts that using the public resources to improve people's life is proper use rather than to fund artists. In some senses, it is true that because budget of government comes from people's tax, when the officers decide how the budget use, first consideration is people's life. In my point of view, however, considering that more harder people's life is more positively affecting the art can do and that traditional arts have value to be preserved, however people's life is not abundant, it could be right to designate the budget to artists.
Of course, few would disagree that the most important thing that a government have to consider first is that well being of their citizens. Considering many historical examples which shows that the time when the development and popularity of art is most largest is similar with development of economy state, well-being of people's life could be overrode. For example, during middle age, so-called dark age, only few artist could do their work by being funded by wealthy the nobles. However, as average level of life raised in Industrial Revolution time, many artist came to world and as a result, many new kinds of art occurred. This shows that to develop and continue, arts need capitals
However, can we always say that ignoring the art is beneficial? My answer is definitely no. Considering that beautiful music and paintings and video media such soap opera or movies can heal people's scarred mind which result from hard life, giving fund art is as valuable as invest money to infrastructure. For example, in Korea, there was IMF economy crisis. At that time, many people was fired from their companies or, even, their company gone bankruptcy and in this case they could do anything. But, many people such as my father who experienced such dark time says that singers's songs which have message about hope can help the people having power to overcome terrible pain. This shows that art can be as important as good job and wealthy sometimes.
Moreover, considering that some kinds of arts which have been passed down from ancestors is important as itself because of their scholar value or can be important tourism resource, it is important to preserve those old art of a country. For example, many people who come from all around world visit Italy to see Roman style buildings. And the money which the tourists use vastly help Italy's financial states and help raise sales of near shops. If Italy government destroyed those buildings to construct modern-styled buildings, there is no reason many foreign people visit Italy. This shows that importance of preserving old art such as buildings, statues and so on.
To summarize, many people would agree that the most important role of a government is achieving well-being of their citizens. However, considering that art can be or give invisible resources and that traditional art is important as itself but it can be another resource which can help to earn large amount of money. Only foolish people who ignore importance of arts and continuing it claims that art is not valuable
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 469, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'harder' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: harder
...oint of view, however, considering that more harder peoples life is more positively affecti...
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Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'largest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: largest
...he development and popularity of art is most largest is similar with development of economy ...
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Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun artist seems to be countable; consider using: 'few artists'.
Suggestion: few artists
...ng middle age, so-called dark age, only few artist could do their work by being funded by ...
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Line 3, column 687, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...develop and continue, arts need capitals However, can we always say that ignoring...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, so, well, for example, of course, such as, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 33.0 11.3162921348 292% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2685.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 537.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57314713489 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487895716946 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 831.6 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9145138461 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.045454545 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4090909091 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59090909091 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28695325055 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891977659874 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104722122063 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175680819691 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.094993385617 0.0667264976115 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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