College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure to ad

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College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The choice of one's field of study is not a trivial one. Most student's move forward with their interests and passion, but there is an ongoing debate. The prompt recommends that aspiring college students should decide their future paths on the current availability of jobs in the world. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this suggestion and argue that students should look inwards and pursue their interests for two reasons.

To begin, job market is ever shifting and our society grows within this environment. Yesterday's popular job may not be today's most favoured profession. For instance, in the past, people used to work in various factories for sewing clothes or arranging parts for automobiles. Nowadays, everything is been automated through robots and people have shifted to programming and data science to learn more about automation and it's uses. Hence, students trying to grab these conventional jobs which may seem attractive for now may not be the one which will make you successful.

Additionally, students should pursue their own interests and decide their goals accordingly. If a student is dedicated enough they will definitely make a greatest discovery and change the perspective of the whole world. For example, majority of people did not consider automation or vehicles running on battery power. Elon Musk started Tesla and pursued his interests and achieve his goals and proved everyone wrong. Now, everyother automobile company has started working on developing their own Electric Vehicles and is trying to compete with Tesla. Therefore, students who are specifically scared of pursuing their goals should take these real life examples which will motivate them and their project or an idea could be the biggest breakthrough of the century.

Of course, some argue that not going the standard method may be scary and also may lead to failures. However, unless and until someone does not give themselves a chance, they will be stuck in this endless loop of ever-shifting job market.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
The choice of ones field of study is not a trivial one. Mo...
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Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...icated enough they will definitely make a greatest discovery and change the persp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, hence, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, of course, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 323.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23529411765 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6587776734 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616099071207 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 704.065955056 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3585565813 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4705882353 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.21951772744 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229608425134 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675784738176 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582839828693 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127604191466 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067635313618 0.0667264976115 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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