College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.
It is obvious that one gets entrenched to something that passionate them, then only they might get high success with no doubt. In this harsh and scheduled life, people barely listened to what they like but runs after what money, society and jobs, and gets the dissatisfied result. The prompt recommends that college students are motivated either intrinsic or extrinsic to pursue the subject with their respective interests rather than courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the suggestion that students should be motivated according to their will and act the passionate decision rather than pushing themselves to a subject they do not desire while choosing the college.
To begin, jobs are mostly skilled based, those only get marketed with 'value' in the world who can do better in their perspective field, otherwise, they have regret on the sole they have walked in for jobs only. Thus, it is obvious that people who emphasized overly in jobs must be pro in a particular field. For instance, many people have adept of ideology regarding computer technology which definitely can lead one to enthralling and prosperous jobs. Consequently, in this efficacious and skill demanding century, one can only be benefitted if they have high knowledge. However, to be focused only on jobs rather than interests can lead to a calamitous situation if not handled properly. Students who could not uplift themselves according to the dextrous need of society can lean lead them to nowhere- and this could be magnificent for those students who can achieve best in their perspective field with their interest. The above example illustration states that job demands are fluctuating according to the market need and skill enhancement and without certain interests, a student may not develop the guaranteed progress on their own.
Furthermore, interest plays a major role in framing the individual gratifying success because interest can bolster individual achievement. Also, it creates intrinsic motivation to do better day by day which is not legitimate with a compelled subject. For instance, if a student who is passionate about 'fashion designing' chooses engineering subject may void her passion within the time and replace her compassion to something not welcomed. Researchers have demonstrated if students get followed by there interest they may persuade happiness with an appropriate goal which may not hamper their there career development. Thus, when students are attracted by their interest they can make highly achievable qualities and explore new things in their perspective field. Thus, college teachers, parents, self-motivation should be regulated while choosing the subject matter. Always jobs and highly regulated money power does not give satisfaction, there need to be will which makes them unstoppable to create there dreams in a variant way. Moreover, students are the backbone of the country, if they are only passionate about jobs, money, and success, nothing new can be achieved in progress, which can be a great loss to the country too.
Of course, someone might argue that without jobs and highly paid salary one may not be happy and get disheartened by their interest. Nevertheless, it's isn't practical to get dishonored with the passion we loved. Instead of getting a successive failure on the undesired path, it's better to go with little success with the wished path. Without passion and interests, the student may develop some fruitful advances as they can with potential interests.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to engineer'.
Suggestion: to engineer
...sionate about fashion designing chooses engineering subject may void her passion within the...
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...them unstoppable to create there dreams in a variant way. Moreover, students are the backbone of...
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Suggestion: isn't
...ed by their interest. Nevertheless, its isnt practical to get dishonored with the pa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, regarding, so, then, thus, while, for instance, no doubt, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 29.0 12.4196629213 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2985.0 2235.4752809 134% => OK
No of words: 566.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27385159011 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77158704348 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496466431095 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 906.3 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4136766007 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.782608696 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6086956522 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04347826087 5.21951772744 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270729102376 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842212597351 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104442240633 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179062252601 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114367039504 0.0667264976115 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 100.480337079 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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