Creating an appealing image has become more important in contemporary society than is the reality or truth behind that image.
The speaker claims that it more important in modern society to create an appealing image than the reality underlying it. In my point of view, it is doubtless that an appealing appearance has gain more significant, however, we still cannot ignore the real things behind it. I will analyze it in different aspects.
To begin with, from the personal aspect, the first image is crucial no matter in the interview or social circle. We are living in a highly competitive society. Considering you are a person who is looking for a job as a neophyte graduated from school. It is important to make your outer part attractive, not only diversify the resume when you are preparing for it but make your appearance as a decent and skillful outlook to in order to outshine innumerable competitors around you. Or considering you are finding a partner of your life on the internet platform, which rife with different choices so that devoid of time to delve deeper into inner parts of each other. In this sense, in order to maintain one’s competitiveness edge in this market, they must to represent their best part of image to catch other’s eye in the first place.
From the public aspect, focusing on their outer images also help celebrity to achieve their responsibility. The goal for the public people is to promote specific thought and influence people. For example, one of the essential things that a president of a country needs to do is to unite a country and disseminate the right ethos and thought but not be an impeccable person in the private time. The values of a singers or super stars are largely depend on their influences: they can propagate correct moral value and thought just through their short appear on the television show or advertisement. Therefore, for these people, focusing on their appearance can complete their duties.
However, what I just assert doesn’t mean we can overlook the reality and the true part behind it. Although the potent appearance of people and celebrities help them to facilitate their achievement in the first place, the long term performance of the career and the development of a country are still need large effort to maintain which depends on the concrete foundation behind them. Having a good prospect in the worker’s career after he or she is enrolled in the company need their concrete working skills; Maintaining a relationship of happiness still need the effort of communication and empathy; successfully running a country also need incessant work to solve problems that exist in the society. All of it is come from the true and real capacities.
To sum up, in the society, the appealing and right appearance is important, it not only benefit a person in their interview or social circle, but in the larger landscape, it ensures the correct influences that celebrities bring to people. But in the same time, we cannot overlook the long term ramification that results from the real things behind superficial appearances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 751, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...mpetitiveness edge in this market, they must to represent their best part of image to c...
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Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a singer' or simply 'singers'?
Suggestion: a singer; singers
...rson in the private time. The values of a singers or super stars are largely depend on th...
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Line 5, column 446, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...of a singers or super stars are largely depend on their influences: they can propagate...
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Line 7, column 301, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'needed'.
Suggestion: needed
... the development of a country are still need large effort to maintain which depends ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, still, therefore, for example, to begin with, to sum up, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2481.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 500.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.962 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80162452873 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.39242534 60.3974514979 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.05 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161903161237 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529487035489 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111892125579 0.0758088955206 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111439167801 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136326773076 0.0667264976115 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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