Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
The statement depicts the responsibility of educational institutions. From my perspective of view, I disagree with the claim. According to the laws, children have the rights to be educated in order to knowledge about not only theory and practical skills but also the thoughts of lives. Under no circumstances can someone deprive the rights. What is the meaning of education? The question has been discussed from the past to the present; in addition, the policy of education is amended for many times in order to decrease the crime rate and unemployment rate.
Not only does the statement claim the goal of the education is to pursue the profession, but it also implies the aim is to success. Students are desired to be professional in their favorite fields; nevertheless, everyone has diverse talents. There is no doubt that the teachers have the responsibility to persuade the students in pursuit of their success based on their talents. However, do the teachers have the rights to recognize the impossibilities of students because of scanty intelligence? Based on the statement, in addition, it makes much more emphasis on the pursuit of success, which is equivalent to the standard of testing scores.
In terms of the success, everyone pursues the different goal, academic success or practical knowledge. However, academic success is not the guarantee of employment. Apart from the academic performance, it is significant to learn the practical skills in order to face the unexpected unemployment. Therefore, not only can it decrease the unemployment rate, but it can also dwindle the crime rate, which might be result from the poor and the homeless.
Apart from the academic performance, on the other hand, morality plays an important role in our lives. From my perspective of view, students should be taught the thoughts of lives rather than reaching the academic success. For example, students spare no efforts to pursue the high grades in order to demonstrate their abilities; however, some students cannot tolerate the frustrations, such as the low grades, and suicide. In contrast to learning the morality, students are taught to reach perfection so that they are responsible people. As the result, many juveniles lost their lives by virtue of the frustrations according to the news.
The meaning of the education is in debate all over the world. In the Western countries, the aim of education is to encourage the children to pursue their favorite field; by contrast, in the Eastern countries, the goal of education is reaching the higher grades in order to improve competent. Although the statement depicts one of the functions, I cannot agree that it emphasizes the importance of reaching the success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, apart from, for example, in addition, in contrast, no doubt, such as, in contrast to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2281.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 440.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18409090909 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96348211394 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456818181818 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 707.4 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.38483146067 319% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.8020888408 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1739130435 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1304347826 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78260869565 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229327718428 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629936663337 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413317640167 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124390628967 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295844098375 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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