Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
The statement reveals a point of view that the educational institutions should play an active role in the students’ major or occupational choices, with which I agree very much. However, what I cannot fully accept the claim is that it is stated to the extreme that the educational institutions should dissuade students from choosing certain fields of study. Hence I agree with some reservation, considering that some revision could enhance it.
First of all, part of the statement is reasonable, indeed. Certainly, students do need some instructions from the institutions when they are facing the various choices of majors and professions. The truth is that students are too young to calculate on important choices comprehensively. For one thing, they sometimes do not have enough information about, say, a certain major. One youngster may take it for granted that the actuary is just doing some calculations, whereas are dismayed very much for its complicate theoretical framework. On this occasion if the advisors could clarify for him what does actuary do, he could be clearer about the major and avoid choosing it merely by imagination. For another, students cannot usually evaluate themselves effectively since they have limited life experience and subjective distortions. Help from the institutions could facilitate them to make objective self-assessments thus the career choices could be made based on advantages and disadvantages. A student who is skilled at logical thinking might prosper his career in the academia, while one good at writing would gain an edge in the press. The educational institutions could play a positive role in those choices, consequently benefiting both the students and the whole society since the human resources are arranged according to their pros and cons.
However, should the educational institutions thus dissuade students from trying some fields if they are not likely to succeed? I think the answer given in the statement is a bit presumptuous hence I cannot accept it without reservation.
Surely, if the students choose something they are not suitable for, they might finally feel frustrated, and the time and energy wasted are not good for social efficiency, either. But this is not the reason that the institutions exploit students’ right to try. On one hand, the possible failure is not that serious. The students are so young and energetic that if they fail in something they can just switch to a new field. On the contrary, the experience of trying various choices would be more precious than success, because it is in the process of trying do the students know themselves better. On the other hand, actually even the instructors do not know whether some student would succeed in some field, for the reason that they focus on students’ talent more while ignore their persistence. In most of the cases, although one does not show talent in a field, he could fix this flaw by practicing more. As is mentioned numerously, practice makes perfect. The student who is unlikely to succeed in a field could finally win the applause by persistence.
To sum up, for most part of the statement I give my agreement due to the help it could give in students’ career choice. But I do not deem that it is necessary dissuading students from choosing some fields of study.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... from choosing certain fields of study. Hence I agree with some reservation, consider...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'but', 'consequently', 'finally', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'thus', 'whereas', 'while', 'i think', 'first of all', 'for one thing', 'on the contrary', 'to sum up', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.196078431373 0.240241500013 82% => OK
Verbs: 0.165032679739 0.157235817809 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0833333333333 0.0880659088768 95% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0686274509804 0.0497285424764 138% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0571895424837 0.0444667217837 129% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.124183006536 0.12292977631 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0408496732026 0.0406280797675 101% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.95592445082 2.79330140395 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.016339869281 0.030933414821 53% => OK
Particles: 0.0016339869281 0.0016655270985 98% => OK
Determiners: 0.109477124183 0.0997080785238 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0359477124183 0.0249443105267 144% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00980392156863 0.0148568991511 66% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3335.0 2732.02544248 122% => OK
No of words: 543.0 452.878318584 120% => OK
Chars per words: 6.14180478821 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.58838876751 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.364640883978 0.366273622748 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.281767955801 0.280924506359 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.204419889503 0.200843997647 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.130755064457 0.132149295362 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95592445082 2.79330140395 106% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 219.290929204 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482504604052 0.48968727796 99% => OK
Word variations: 57.5031478142 55.4138127331 104% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6194690265 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.8846153846 23.380412469 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5608419922 59.4972553346 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.269230769 141.124799967 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8846153846 23.380412469 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.730769230769 0.674092028746 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 49.0614109647 51.4728631049 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.24157303371 1.64882698954 75% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256294755312 0.391690518653 65% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0840595439384 0.123202303941 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0640317540014 0.077325440228 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.486020960524 0.547984918172 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.157033822742 0.149214159877 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103378838934 0.161403998019 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848132257666 0.0892212321368 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.392449357734 0.385218514788 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0340899068892 0.0692045440612 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208376700994 0.275328986314 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377080872145 0.0653680567796 58% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.30420353982 170% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 7.22455752212 208% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 3.66592920354 218% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 24.0 13.5995575221 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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