Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study in which jobs are plentiful.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
P#1
Education is vital for both individuals and nations, as it provides the opportunities to personal success and talents for nations. That gives no doubt of the significant role educational institutions plays. So, the following question we need to consider is that what is the appropriate way for educational institution to guide their students. While some people think that educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study in which jobs are plentiful, I hold the view that we cannot fully accept that idea as this may lead to horrible things, reasons are as follows:
P#2
Firstly, I need to argue that I partly agree with the idea of encourage students to choose fields where jobs are plentiful. Many students in America may be African or Asian, thus their social positions are not that high. Therefore, many parents send their students to school as they want them to reach higher social position. Those fields where jobs are less will add burden to those families and it is unwise to encourage them to make this choice. The best way for them would be majoring in computer science and law, which gives them fixed income and high social position. Considering these people, I think we should encourage them to choose fields with more job opportunities.
P#3
However, I do not think it a good idea to fully accept the issue as there are several setbacks. One is that if we do so, those fields with less job opportunities but is essential for human civilization will not be visited and result in great loss. Take myself as an example, as a student major in pure mathematics, I noticed that the amount of student in pure mathematic institution of my school is very low and there is less people choose algebra geometry as their major field as it has no application in real world thus jobs opportunities are less. But the idea in algebra geometry is really advanced and important in mathematic which cannot be thrown away. If we accept the issue fully, then I will sad when I saw no one will visit the field of algebra geometry anymore, and this is definitely a huge loss.
P#4
What’s more, we need to consider the problem that such policy will let people become utilitarianism. If we encourage all students purchase job but not academic goal, then the society would naturally place money and power in the first place, leading to a bad moral of society, which is exactly not what we want to see. The education in young age will directly determine that a person will be when he becomes adult, so the value of education would be the value of society, thus we cannot fully adopt this issue.
P#5
As we have discussed above, although the issue has some reasonable room, we need to be cautious with its setbacks. Educational institution needs to provide aptly suggestion to students by considering both their interests and their future career!
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, thus, while, i think, no doubt, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82494969819 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64763809656 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472837022133 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.3745690151 60.3974514979 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.210526316 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1578947368 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250254865384 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770767537571 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616404321459 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149145062265 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721086876183 0.0667264976115 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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