GRE sample issue pool essay topic 129
Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study in which jobs are plentiful.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Graduates of educational Institutions these days spend about 5 years in school only to end up roaming the streets with their degree certificate. There is an existing issue encouraging institutions to incite their students to explore fields with more opportunities. I mostly disagree with this notion as jobs these days undergo an unreliable trend.
To start with, availability of job opportunities in most countries seem to obey trend changes. The society is constantly developing inciting new needs and more pressing challenges superceding previously established ones. For example, there were a couple of students going for secretarial studies years ago, because roles of secretarial assistants were rampant and fairly profitable. However, with the advent of technological improvement, the need for this role dwindled, as the position transitioned from human management to being controlled by computerised systems. While some job opportunities dissappeared, seemingly uncommon fields blossomed. Hence, field whose job are plentiful today may become austere tomorrow.
In addition, plentiful jobs is not tantamount to profitability, and hence would not be in the best interest of the student. For example, the availability of myriads of cleaning opportunities would not make a university to encourage its students to go study a related course. This is simply because this particular role, although, easy to get, is not profitable and might not be sufficient to meet the needs of such an individual. Also, some roles are highly sought after, even though not plentiful. For instance, mechatronic engineering is a yet unpopular field, but with many prospects in the society. An institution should encourage its students to jump on such fields.
However, some individuals who were not gainfully employed after graduation must have spent years in a studying a field they had no idea about the opportunities. It is a good effort that the university is trying to influence the student choices. But the eventual decision still lies on them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in addition, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 314.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48407643312 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16032059653 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630573248408 0.4932671777 128% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2077798402 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6666666667 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4444444444 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168775704158 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543252264634 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473670677435 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102493876112 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474948135346 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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