Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
should humanity me moved only by money? The statement claims that educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers. however, I strongly disagree with that mainly for the reasons that will be explored in the following essay. First, we live in a dynamic world, so how can someone today tell what will be a lucrative career in the future? Second, there life is not only about money. Finally, do educational institutions have the right to make this judgment and determine our future?
The labor market is every time a more rapidly adapting environment and it has already been shown that it can change very quickly. Therefore, the probability to choose a career path today believing that it will provide high wages does not guarantee that. To illustrate that point, consider the example of nuclear engineering back in the sixties. At that time, the profession was skyrocketing, and everyone could bet that it was the profession of the future. If educational institutions had directed their students to that path, today there would be so many unemployed nuclear engineers! consequently, the assessment of the likelihood of success may be strongly biased.
Further, besides the important fact that we live in capitalists’ societies and money does matter, life cannot be only about it. In fact, there is no evidence on the causality relation between money and what should be our ultimate goal: happiness. For instance, the suicide rate among very rich artists is very high so we can argument that money could even be harmful. The above example illustrates that, money by itself cannot bring joy and other important aspects for human life.
Moreover, there is an ethical point that has to be addressed: are schools and universities allowed to interfere in the student’s decisions in that way? how students might react to that? Particularly, the way in which educational institutions apply that policy might not only be unconstitutional, but also can have profound consequences on our society. Research has consistently demonstrated that individuals driven only, or mainly, by money, are more arrogant, violent and intolerant to diversity. is really that society that we want to built for our children’s future?
On the other hand, it is important that educational institutions have coaching opportunities in order to explore each student potential and ambitions. however, that should not be an imposition made by the institution, in order to avoid traumas. For the reasons exposed above, I argue that students should be free to pursue their dreams and careers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, as to, for instance, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2256.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 425.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30823529412 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97637665511 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548235294118 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1911951243 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0869565217 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4782608696 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78260869565 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215483772938 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064275200471 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105519325984 0.0758088955206 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128351306021 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0918464441586 0.0667264976115 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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