Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Education is a process of teaching and learning which seeks to improve knowledge and skills. In other words, education can be called a step towards progress and development since it aims at making the society knowledgeable and skilled. In the process, education involves changing some of the long held ideas and beliefs. The author claims that education institutes should the educational institutions promote and encourage students to follow a path where the probability of success is high. Even though there is certain merit in this claim it is riddled with shortcomings. What is the ideal definition of success? Do all people who do not follow the trend deemed unsuccessful? These are some of the questions which the author has not addressed.
Success can be a relative term. For some people success can be defined as a financial stability while for other it can be deemed as independence from the 9 to 5 job. Therefore instead of focussing on training students for the “lucrative” jobs , educational institutes should focus on making the student independent and bold enough to make proper choices in life and prepare the candidate to face the resultant consequences. The main focus of education should be to free the student and make them capable of thinking on their own and not to train them for a specific career. Education is meant to foster creativity and propose unique solutions for the existing problems and not fall prey avaricious desires of humans.
Moreover, there have been various examples in the past as well as in the present where people have chosen their passion over traditional course of action and have been very affluent in doing the same. Mark Zuckerberg, Bill Gates, Peter Theil are some of the prime examples in this case. These pioneers choose to follow their dreams over the pressing attitude of their educational institutions and hence successfully made an impact in the world. This not only enabled them to make an impact but also helped them create successful and creative startups that foster millions of jobs.
However, the above mentioned approach has a sizeable disadvantage as well. Even though such a approach fosters and bolsters creativity, there is a sizeable risk involved in such an approach. Sometimes creativity is not openly accepted by the society and neither is independence. Consider the example of Van Gogh, an epitome of creativity and a genius in his field who went unrecognised till the time of his death. Van Gogh sold only one painting till his death since his style of painting was not openly accepted during that era. There is also a huge risk of failure involved and hence it could be one reason that educational institutes try to encourage students to take more “stable” jobs compared to the “riskier” ones.
However, finally to conclude I would like to state that, even though there are many risks and shortcomings to the philosophy of “following your passion” it is always better to chase your dream and strive for financial and creative independence rather than traverse an already treaded path and do a mundane and ubiquitous job which would hold you in chains and deprive you of the basic right – the ability to think independently and creatively.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...he process, education involves changing some of the long held ideas and beliefs. The author...
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Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ere the probability of success is high. Even though there is certain merit in this claim it...
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...he trend deemed unsuccessful? These are some of the questions which the author has not addr...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'job' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'jobs'.
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... deemed as independence from the 9 to 5 job. Therefore instead of focussing on trai...
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...dents for the 'lucrative' jobs , educational institutes should focus on ...
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...to face the resultant consequences. The main focus of education should be to free the stud...
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...Zuckerberg, Bill Gates, Peter Theil are some of the prime examples in this case. These pion...
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... disadvantage as well. Even though such a approach fosters and bolsters creativit...
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... to think independently and creatively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2724.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 536.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08208955224 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97457691215 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524253731343 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 861.3 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.178583557 60.3974514979 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.5 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154231331984 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0410767860955 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565031159488 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0797607007368 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596942749321 0.0667264976115 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 100.480337079 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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