Educators should find out what students want included in the curriculum and then offer it to them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Education is the backbone of a nation, and perfect and competent eduncators are the grace for the education system. The prompt states that educators should find out what students want included in the curriculum and then offer it to them. I strongly disagree with the statement and argue that educators should take the decision what would be included in the curriculum and then offer it to the students. My position is based on two reasons.
Firstly, school students have really a small knowledge regarding which subjects are important for their higher education. However, their educators know which subjects are basic for their higher study. For example, in school when calculus is added to the mathematics, maximum students are ambivalent that why this courses in there, what is application of that course? Calculus is the integral part of the science and engineering. Almost in every part of the sciece and engineering there are application of calculus. Students may not be aware of it, but the educators know it clearly that this subject is basic for the science students. If students have the liberty in subject choice, then many students may exclude this subject which will not be a good decision if they want to study science and engineering in their future. the example shows us that educators are aware enough that which courses will help the students in their future. Thus, educator should make the curriculum for the ultimate betterment of the students.
Secondly, students often need the courses for their career and further studies, which they do not like, but as they want to continue their respective path, they should take those courses. For example, during the undergraduation period of engineering half of the semesters are related with the basic science and mathematics. There is a possibility that maximum students of engineering will not take those basic subjects if they get the chance to make their own choice. However, still those subjects are offered by the educators because they know the requirement of those subjects to learn the real engineering. Therefore, almost in every case and every steps of the educations educators are the authority to select which subjects need to taught, specially for the fundemantal subjects as they know the real case.
In conclusion, students may have sometimes their personal preference, and sometimes, students can take elective courses by their interests but the educators know, which subjects and topics are important for the students, and which will be effective for their future struggle. Therefore, educators should take the decision what would be included in the curriculum and then offer it to the students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 434.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19124423963 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67176306325 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.400921658986 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.0 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1255823497 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.65 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268616918602 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103764132893 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0870716926938 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214456878879 0.150359130593 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0881662241606 0.0667264976115 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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