Essay topic 16: The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
People typically make decisions to give authority to the government officials so as to manage the society fairly and efficiently. People have the right to involve in political decisions in some cases and question the authority to ensure maintenance of their power and amelioration of conditions. Thus, it is essential for the well being of society that people question the authority.
First of all, power has the tendency to corrupt people. To assure that government is making the right decisions to serve people, people should question the authority. If citizens are unable to question actions taken by the government, it would lead to the concentration of power by officials and consequently monarchy and corruption. For instance, Hitler had the absolute power when he was chosen as the leader of Germany which eventually led him to crush anyone who objected to his policies and worsened the welfare of the people. There are also other cases such as North Korea which are ruled under the dictatorship by centralization of power in the hand of specific people and people have been restricted to express their voice against government and the welfare of the society has been decreased rather than increased.
In contrary, bias questioning of the authority may impede their efficiency while democracy promotes the quality of life, some people lack political awareness to question the authority. For example, the public in Iran has an ignorance of issues like petroleum revenues. This problem can be ameliorated by raising the public awareness to make their participation in political decisions more effectively. Government should also have platforms for interactive communication with the public to enhance their involvement in the political issues and invoke their eagerness in making positive investment.
In conclusion, questioning the authority is an integral part of a society to maintain its well being and avoid monarchy and corruption. However, to avoid bias questioning and enhancement of government efficiency, public raise their awareness of political issues.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...e authority to the government officials so as to manage the society fairly and efficient...
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Line 5, column 533, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: There are other; There are also
...and worsened the welfare of the people. There are also other cases such as North Korea which are rul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, thus, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 323.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46439628483 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98991073112 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501547987616 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2421013177 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.071428571 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9285714286 5.21951772744 209% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168692906903 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673581293431 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058630888927 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112205465833 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199584530089 0.0667264976115 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 48.8420337079 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.