Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
It might seem logical, at first glance, to agree with the argument that student evaluation of professors should be terminate in Omega University in order to firmly evaluate students’ ability. However, in order to fully evaluate this argument, a significant amount of additional evidence should be provided.
The first piece of evidence that we need in order to examine the conclusion is the information about the relationship between the implementation of student evaluation system and the soaring overall grades of students. Firstly, there is not strong evidence to suggest that the new procedure would encourage professor to assign higher grades in order to get good remarks from students. Perhaps some professors’ humorous teaching styles would help them earn good reputations among students. Besides, the overall rising averages at Omega University could caused by other factors such as students’ learning abilities. By no means can we deny the possibility that the university might upgrade their standards of enrollment, and thereby students might be more intelligent and industrious compared with those 15 years ago. If it is the case, the conclusion that implementing new procedure would lead to dramatic rise in grades would be seriously weakened.
Another piece of evidence require additional information is that Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting job opportunities as those from Alpha University. It could turn out to be the case, for example, that the Omega was a university that emphasizes subjects of Liberal Arts which are not so promising as science and engineering subjects, but Alpha taught more engineering subjects. Therefore, graduates from Alpha might have more pragmatic and practical skills to help them get jobs easily. Furthermore, as seeking job opportunities doesn’t totally depend on students’ academic achievements, perhaps it is because Alpha University offered more courses that train students to tackle the interviewers from corporations and firms that students there could know more about how to earn the preference from interviewers; however, students in Omega might lack such worldly abilities. If we were to learn that the different teaching contents of the two universities may be the root of why students have differences when finding jobs, it would significantly undermine the conclusion.
In conclusion, additional evidence need to be attached to the article to help us evaluation the conclusion that the student evaluation of professors would undermine students’ ability of seeking jobs, so it should be terminated in Omega. The missing evidence involves both the valid causality between such a procedure and the inaccurate academic assessment and the contents of study in two distinct universities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 116, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'terminated'?
Suggestion: terminated
...dent evaluation of professors should be terminate in Omega University in order to firmly ...
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Line 3, column 557, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...sing averages at Omega University could caused by other factors such as students'...
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Line 5, column 520, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... help them get jobs easily. Furthermore, as seeking job opportunities doesn'...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60377358491 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14267075821 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 755.1 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.5156877739 60.3974514979 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.4 118.986275619 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2666666667 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.21951772744 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252338683723 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869105890159 0.0831039109588 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464133000909 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155641464285 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628498526958 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 14.1392134831 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.14 48.8420337079 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.1743820225 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.1639044944 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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