Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
“A good journey always starts with a good first step.” Lao Tzu coined this quote many years ago and, despite being approximately 2500 year saying, it is very vivid in today's world. The foundation of a well-balanced educations starts with a solid first step. The prompt states that formal education strangles the mind instead of setting it free. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with the passage and argue that learning is what motivates us to go further, for three main reasons.
To begin, formal education teaches students character. It is during the scholar period of our lives that we learn about responsibility, discipline, camaraderie, and friendship. These qualities are necessary to become free from the chains of ignorance. For instance, children go to school and start learning how to speak. But the child doesn’t know when it is proper to talk, therefore kids are always chatting and screaming, trying to make their point clear. In school, in parallel with parenting, children are taught about discipline and when to talk. As the children grow older, professors start to challenge them in new ways, with diverse activities and projects that enable them to test and refine their responsibilities. During physical activities, teenagers learn about camaraderie and friendship, especially in team sports where ‘I’ has no place in it. Clearly, schools are a safe environment where students can learn to express themselves and expand their minds.
Further, education helps people acknowledge that what we know is limited. As we start learning new things, our “cup” of knowledge starts to fill up. We can see the cup filling and say to ourselves that either the cup is half full our half empty. The half empty mentality is the real deal, because we are not satisfied with what we have in the cup, we can’t to know more to make the cup filled with information. For instance, a student that finishes his bachelor’s degree has a pretty good understanding of his area of ability. Once he starts his graduate studies, he starts asking more questions for which there are no good answers, and he must, on his own, walk through the dense forest of knowledge to reach the border of knowledge and push a little further to contribute with something. It is for this reason that studying, learning and implementing gives us the freedom to choose the unanswered questions and give our point of view.
Of course, many argue that not everything is taught inside the rigid walls of school. Many life lessons can come from unexpected places, where people might think that there is nothing there. In general, people that live in the country side, mainly farmers, are known to have a limited amount of formal education, but these people have a lot of life lessons that came from struggles in life. Maybe a simple man doesn’t know much about algebra but he sure does know about managing money, cutting wastes and making profit. He may not be the most grandiloquent person in his city but he most certainly knows how to talk to suppliers, how to make deals and how to lure investments.
In conclusion, although school doesn’t have all the answers in the world but it gives people the tools for us to become free and search for answers. The only thing that restrains our mind and spirit is the ‘I give up’ mentality.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'frees'?
Suggestion: frees
...trangles the mind instead of setting it free. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, in general, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2810.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 563.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99111900533 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76725637619 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 215.323595506 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532859680284 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 833.4 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1939639488 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.074074074 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8518518519 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96296296296 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109099919531 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0332701165313 0.0831039109588 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036872493018 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0669492553235 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302229637826 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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