The general welfare of a nation's people is a better indication of that nation's greatness than are the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
Owning to the increased demand of welfare stimulated by the intensified sense of satisfaction of the populace in our society, the balance between the general welfare and the achievements of a nation's political leaders, artists or scientists has received increasing attention and consideration in contemporary society. For this reason, spates of people maintain an opinion that the welfare of ordinary people overweighs those achievements. In my personal opinion, this standpoint should be analyzed and deliberated on a case by case basis.
Keeping and retaining the living standard of people depend on the greatness of the whole nation, which is connected closely by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists. For instance, the GNH, namely Gross National Happiness, of Northern Europeans showed their advantaged society and living condition, which are explicable in a survey conducted recently. In the heyday of those nations, the citizens are administered by the enlightened leaders, surrounded by the progressive techniques, elegant art achievements and the opportunities to prompt themselves. We cannot neglect the relations of the wise officials, advanced technologies, even though the consequential achievements in the field of art. Therefore, we should not ignore the backgrounds preserved by the rulers or scientists for the nation.
Admittedly, the norm which is prevailing not only in the past but also in modern life is that the host of a nation is the people in it, namely the insufficient for a nation's greatness simply by measuring those accomplishments. Hence, to judge the greatness of the nation, one should put the people foremost, especially the general welfare of every citizen. Even we have no precise and particular illustration to exemplify my view point, common sense and social experience can tell us that the success or failure is determined by the living condition of the average people who live in the country. Only by seeking to ameliorate the welfare and improve the well-being of the common people, can we ensure the basic living allowance and elementary payment of the minority group such as the poor, the elderly, the disabled, and then maintain the stability of our society.
From the frondose analyses and embodied demonstration made above, I strongly consent to the notion that for the sake of weighing the greatness of a nation, one should highlight the general welfare, not only because the development of society depends on the citizens, but also the people should have all of the priority and basic rights.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...general welfare and the achievements of a nations political leaders, artists or scientist...
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Line 1, column 446, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...le overweighs those achievements. In my personal opinion, this standpoint should be analyzed and...
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Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...le in it, namely the insufficient for a nations greatness simply by measuring those acc...
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Line 7, column 300, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...tizens, but also the people should have all of the priority and basic rights.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2164.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35643564356 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07048843436 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527227722772 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.6495345062 60.3974514979 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.461538462 118.986275619 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0769230769 23.4991977007 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282998846378 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10148444205 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093218507769 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162020515939 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404989050298 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 14.1392134831 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 48.8420337079 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.1743820225 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.4 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.41 8.38706741573 124% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.7820224719 144% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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