Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
it is doubtful to encourage governments to secure the financial support for their major cities on its own, even if cultural traditions are better presented in major metapolitans, not to mention its inplausibility of the argument that nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated. The policy within the statement stands on a ramshackle presumption which can be easily attacked and collapse.
Historically, cities emerged after human process of nomadic lifestyles, migrating and dewells from place to place depended on the weather and resource conditions. Thanks to the development of tools and agricultural skills, human beings were then settled down in small villages, in close vicinity of their crops, before the further advancement of agricultural economy which lead to formation of massive gatherings of population, the cities. Clear enough, cities are not the first method of how people habitated, and thus it would be erroneous to conclude that it is the cities where cultural traditions are originated. In fact, both major cities and scattered rural areas possess different cultural virtues, and they are disparate in nature. shenzhen, for example, one of the major metapolitan in China, is actually a city derived from regulatory policy back in the 1970s. There were only a few villages where people lived on precastorial productions before the country decided to build this area into the largest port to export commodities at that time. it is with clarity irrational to claim that cultural conditions are better preserved and developed in shenzhen, comparing to rural places with thousands years of history in agricultural practice.
Moreover, the hypothesis of possibilities that cities includes more cultural conditions than other places does not necessarily demand financial support to them rather than other regions. Hence the policy being disseminated in the statement needs second thoughts.
With the large amount and net worth of human resource in major cities, it is commonly believed that the average income in cities outnumber it in small ones, which in turn produce more tax income for the city governments. To decide if cities are in need of financial support, one must scrutinize the fiscal performance of metapolitan. providing them with superfluous funding would be unnecessary, if the cities are already dealing with overflows of funding. villages and rural areas, on the other hand, may at the same time suffering from fiscal deficit due to the phenomenon that most young individuals' migration to larger cities. In this case, supporting these areas with financial help would be of more exigency, for the money can aid these places with huge effects. Equipped with financial backups, these areas other than major cities may be revitalized in terms of cultural traditions, and could be infused with fuels to thrive even over those major cities. Under these circumstances, to propose to provide financial support to major cities will only worsen the condition where rural areas are dying culturally because of lack of funding.
To draw a conclusion, I do not agree with the claim in terms of the underlying presumptions and the explicitly indicated policy proposal which maybe beneficial or harmful to the very purpose of it due to the complex of construction of individual city and its surrounding context.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, thus, well, for example, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 91.0 58.6224719101 155% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2834.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 527.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37760910816 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87067488232 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514231499051 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 901.8 704.065955056 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3656446589 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.157894737 118.986275619 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7368421053 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89473684211 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311107638419 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0973971595567 0.0831039109588 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090865155447 0.0758088955206 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168442547455 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0858991127211 0.0667264976115 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.1392134831 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 100.480337079 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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