The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our popular alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. Given the outcry from our customers when we discontinued this product and the fact that none of our competitors offers a comparable product, we can expect pent-up consumer demand for our alpaca coats. This demand and the overall increase in clothing prices will make Sartorian's alpaca overcoats more profitable than ever before."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument of the new vice president of Sartorian needs to be further investigated for it lacks many aspects of supporting pieces within its logical chain. The vice president is new, indicated from the statement, and one cannot deny the possibility that he/she was not in position while the company discontinued the production of the alpaca overcoat line. thus, it may be presumptions that the vice president is giving instead of reality since he/she was not exposed to the situation five years ago. This in turn casts doubts on what the reason lies behind the fact of the discontinuation of the aforementioned production line. although it is indicated by the vice president that the reason was the unability to find a reliable supplier, it could be other factors that contributed to the circumstance as well. For example, alpaca overcoat may not be considered trendy back then, where the consumers did not accept it as much.
it also should be digged deeper regards if the company should resume the production line now. Just because they have found a new fabric supplier is not a reason solid enough to make the decision of such for other contributing components. although equipped with fabric - its raw material- it may still hamper the production and make it less competitive given unsatisfactory production machineary, untrained factory workers, or inefficient assembly lines. To re-operate the production line should be a serious determination after considering all pivotal as well as peripheral factors within the complex industrious setting.
what is more concerning is the expectation of the vice president that once the company puts the alpaca overcoat back on the shelves to sell, they should sell very well. two reasons are offered by the officer, indicating that the market should be avid and desparate to buy a large amount of these overcoats.
Alarmingly, the reasons need further investigation with regards to two issues. First, one needs to confirm that if the demand of such product sustained over the five years. Not being able to buy the product for the past five years does not necessarily mean that the market is thirsty for it when the product is being re-offered. what if the style of alpaca overcoat had long been obsolete and consumers have been purchasing coats of a newer version of designs? Or what if the weather has become warmer and one no longer need a jacket? also, the company's competitor's decision to stop selling these kind of product is possibly due to the out-of-date features of the product itself. thus, instead OF ASsuming that there are larger demand out on the market, the vice president of the company should conduct a thorough market research and scrutinize for other contributors that predominate the direct of the demand-supply relationship.
Lastly, to contend that the company will profit more because of the price raise is absurd and lacks supporting evidence. Even if it is accurate that the selling price of alpaca overcoats is raising, chances are that the cost of the fabric material and labor had increased as well. The margin on the product is not determined only by how much they are selling, but rather the marginal value of the overall cost and the selling price. Under the circumstance where general labor is significantly more expensive than what it was five years ago, it is still possible that the profit on the product will decrease, albeit there is a bump in the selling price.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 576 350
No. of Characters: 2821 1500
No. of Different Words: 264 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.899 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.898 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.734 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 203 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 150 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.621 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.589 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Thus
...production of the alpaca overcoat line. thus, it may be presumptions that the vice p...
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Suggestion: Although
... of the aforementioned production line. although it is indicated by the vice president t...
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Suggestion: It
...sumers did not accept it as much. it also should be digged deeper regards if...
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Suggestion: Although
...such for other contributing components. although equipped with fabric - its raw material...
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Line 5, column 623, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...within the complex industrious setting. what is more concerning is the expectati...
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Suggestion: What
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Suggestion: Two
...es to sell, they should sell very well. two reasons are offered by the officer, ind...
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Suggestion: Also
...warmer and one no longer need a jacket? also, the companys competitors decision to s...
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Line 13, column 592, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...ys competitors decision to stop selling these kind of product is possibly due to the out-o...
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Suggestion: Thus
...of-date features of the product itself. thus, instead OF ASsuming that there are lar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, may, so, still, then, thus, well, while, for example, kind of, as well as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2890.0 2260.96107784 128% => OK
No of words: 574.0 441.139720559 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03484320557 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77280555785 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 204.123752495 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473867595819 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 906.3 705.55239521 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7390872158 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.652173913 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9565217391 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08695652174 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112885456505 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0341457785067 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338063732666 0.0701772020484 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0638434420723 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374448629638 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 98.500998004 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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