Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, because it is primarily in cities that a nation’s culture traditions are preserved and generated.
There is no doubt that reserving traditional cultural and developing unique style of a nation is important. To do so, the speaker of the argument describes that governments should mainly focus on the major cities and ensure it receive adequate financial support. To some extent, we cannot refute the important role of spreading and maintaining the traditional culture that major cities do; however, I assert that we need to put our attention more on the peripheral cities.
I concede that the major city is the representative of a country, it act as an irreplaceable to propagate and maintain the traditions and unique things of the country. Firstly, the main city is usually a hive of activity that a wide range of foreign people living, working or traveling. Therefore, a country’s unique properties and traditional practices can be perceived by global people. More people knowing these traditional things, the less chance it will disappear in the future. Second, most the tourists just visit the major city in their limited traveling time without traveling to other places. Hence the facilities in the main city are those places can impress people most. For example, the museum can present a great amount of antiques that represent a country’s culture, or the exhibitions or performances which are held in the major city are able to tout the speciality of the country. Thus, it is necessary to offer some portions of budget to thrive.
On the other hand, there are two reasons that governments should appropriate more financial support to peripheral cities than the main city. First, rural sites exist more pure culture of a country. The main city is usually highly modernized, the thoughts, practices and conventions are blended with those came from other places. Therefore, compared to major city, the rural cities have higher chance persevere the original and unique part of the region. To illustrate, the extant aboriginal tribes usually exist in rural areas. The traditional rituals and their unique cultural practices are still performed in their lives. These things are precious heritages of culture and are imperative need effort to be preserved.
Furthermore, the budget of major city is more often than not abundant and financial status of rural cities are usually stringent. The major city has a wide range of resources to sustain their financial needs. The dense population of major city boosts a lot of economical activities, the thrive of tourism brings affluence of income to the city. Instead, in the other cities, they are lack of those advantages: they are less population to spur the economic activities, the transportation system are not well-establish to bring consumers to the city and expanding money. Gradually, the local people will abandon their unique but not practical lifestyle and embrace the modern way in order to survive, then the traditional cultural defunct. Thus, it is necessary for government to give the financial support to maintain the traditional life style and things outside the main city.
To sum up, although main city serve an important role to spread a nation’s unique culture, it is more urgent and more needed to support the cities other than major city. Not only in the rural cities preserve more primordial things of a region, but the cultural there are endanger since lacking of adequate money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'receives'?
Suggestion: receives
...focus on the major cities and ensure it receive adequate financial support. To some ext...
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Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'acts'?
Suggestion: acts
... is the representative of a country, it act as an irreplaceable to propagate and ma...
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Line 3, column 604, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...time without traveling to other places. Hence the facilities in the main city are tho...
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Line 7, column 261, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...opulation of major city boosts a lot of economical activities, the thrive of tourism bring...
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Line 7, column 284, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... boosts a lot of economical activities, the thrive of tourism brings affluence of income t...
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Line 9, column 273, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'endangered'.
Suggestion: endangered
...of a region, but the cultural there are endanger since lacking of adequate money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, no doubt, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2822.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 547.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15904936015 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76230313447 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460694698355 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 911.7 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 16.0 4.99550561798 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3989611532 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.538461538 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0384615385 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88461538462 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400308395049 0.243740707755 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108554922038 0.0831039109588 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615179246918 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245780279283 0.150359130593 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572835168223 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 100.480337079 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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