Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation’s cultural traditions are preserved and generated
The statement indicates that in order for a city to protect their culture the sufficient amount of financial is necessary. The statement also underly an assumption that it seems by funding the city, the right of village people will be sacrificed because they also pay the tax but can’t enjoy the same amount of resource. However, it is justifiable within the context of protecting culture, since cities usually play its special roles as the cultural center of a country, in order to preserve one’s own culture, both new and old, financial factor is definitely an important issue, and thus contribution from every people of a nation is necessary.
Undoubtedly, cities usually have more funds and other resources to protect the culture from extinction. For example, in a big city such as London, New York, have many big museum preserve numerous valuable art, paintings, and historical collections. Such facilities are normally not available in a village. As a matter of fact, in a city, there are literally more people will use those facilities and thus generate enough finance to sustain. In addition, those cultural traditions can be protected more effectively since institutions and people in big cities have more professional knowledge as they are more likely to be well-educated.
Compare to bucolic villages, a culture of a city is more dynamic and need more protection. It is not to say the culture of a rural area is not important as a city. Both cultures of city and village are equally valuable, but the preservation of city culture is more urgent. There are more and more people living in big cities, so cultures of big cities are changing rapidly. Besides, sometimes in order to accommodate more people, it’s possible that government destroys an old house and their cultural heritage. For instance, Beijing, the capital of China throughout a long history, however, destroyed most of their ancient old houses and build skyscrapers. Afterward, the city lost its special eastern atmosphere completely.
In conclusion, protecting one’s own culture is a responsibility for every individual. However, it’s essentially not possible to finance a village to protect their culture, since cities are usually with more educated people and have sufficient amount of money to construct or maintain expensive facilities. Moreover, cultures of cities are more dynamic that it requires those facilities more imperative than villages.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 389.0 442.535393258 88% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3264781491 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95075371431 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483290488432 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1498036342 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.111111111 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6111111111 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88888888889 5.21951772744 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264964967539 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958549333646 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620247390487 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174357114733 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441364579317 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 48.8420337079 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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