Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in. Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military
Arts and military are two completely different fields but yet have their own significance and importance. Arts itself is a vast field, it covers various components like music, dance, painting etc. and each of them plays a vital and discrete role in the nation's development, economy as well as it has huge importance in people's daily life from knowledge to entertainment. While, the military is related to security of the country, it protects people from various outside attacks whether it is another country or terrorists as well as it helps to resolve internal matters and control the situations like civil wars or protests. Investment in both fields is necessary and governments are responsible for the improvement and development of both areas.
However, security being the highest priority for governments as well as for the citizens, sometimes, more investments in military is favored. I believe arts should be promoted but there is a need to give military a higher priority, the reason being military needs various ammunition, weapons and security equipment like bullet-proof jackets or special shoes etc. They need latest technologies, latest gadgets to keep themselves ready for all situations which may occur anytime. Also, they need to keep researching new things and improve the weapons, machines, vehicles and other things to be ahead of their enemies.
Moreover, Arts gets promotion through media and people who have some interest in arts, whether it is music, dance or painting, they give it a chance and they choose it as their profession. Thus, it is easier to attract people to choose arts for life and advertise it. On the other hand, military is risky profession, there is always a threat to life to military men. Indeed, people see military as a last option for their earning and even there is very less support and encouragement to join military.
Therefore, military need to be given higher precedence and more budget and investment is required to be allotted to military. First, to keep the military updated with latest technological weapons and to invest for researches and second, to attract more people to join military, to provide them impetus to serve country being part of military by giving appealing salaries, compensations and facilities. Nevertheless, the other areas like Arts should never be compromised and impacted. They should always receive necessary and sufficient amount for their advancements and improvements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 254, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
... plays a vital and discrete role in the nations development, economy as well as it has ...
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Line 3, column 369, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'need the latest'.
Suggestion: need the latest
...roof jackets or special shoes etc. They need latest technologies, latest gadgets to keep th...
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Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ', the latest'.
Suggestion: , the latest
...shoes etc. They need latest technologies, latest gadgets to keep themselves ready for al...
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Line 7, column 163, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the latest'.
Suggestion: with the latest
...ry. First, to keep the military updated with latest technological weapons and to invest for...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as for, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 393.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26463104326 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88386893097 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526717557252 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.727434963 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.705882353 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1176470588 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 5.21951772744 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227717984838 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752067454028 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406826235113 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143276377902 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286212892447 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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