Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Governments are generally frugal when it comes to deciding their budget for each arena contributing to the well-being of our society. And, it is extremely important for them to make a wise acumen. According to some, investments by the government in arts should be as much as that of the military. However, I do not agree to this and I feel that military deserves more investments.
Admittedly, the military has various significant roles to play. From protecting our borders, fighting our enemy countries, taking care of our security to sacrificing their own life, the military does it all. The roles and responsibilities of army and the officials are indeed important and each of their functions depend a lot on our country's resources. The weapons, missiles, bombs are extremely expensive especially when they are of superior quality. Hence, all these expenses must be met by government investments.
Another point to consider is the technological advancements in our society. Technology and gadgets are another facet, which contributes immensely to the military action and planning. In present situation, The enemy countries are using plethora of technical ways to get into our country in order to obtain secret information. Hence, our country must not lag behind as well. This again proves that military needs enormous government funds to function effectively and efficiently.
Nevertheless, arts is also important for our society. It encourages talents all over the country and makes our country recognized on global level. Without arts in our country, we would be culturally deprived. And, government must make enough contribution to this field as well. However, I feel arts is something, which we can enjoy or pursue only when we are safe and secure. And, military is the one who ensures that fact.
In conclusion, military and arts both have their own niche. They are important for a country and society to sustain but military always have an edge over arts since safety and security of our country is of utmost importance. It is only when we have peaceful, safe, secure life, we can enjoy or make the most of other worldly pleasures.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, well, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1805.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 350.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15714285714 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90275168537 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534285714286 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9704642088 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.4782608696 118.986275619 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2173913043 23.4991977007 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30434782609 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103826500285 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0348865070019 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439067795301 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0678674141551 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447108383023 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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