Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and suppor

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Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

To begin , while military strength of nation is certainly paramount for its national security and defense ,hence should be prioritized utmost, Arts and cultural is also an indispensable and integral part of any nation interest, thus to my viewpoint should not be overlooked upon and should be commensurately encouraged like the the military power .This standpoint can be analysed and deliberated through case to case study.

Firstly, Needless to say in today's time wherein every nation of the world are under the menace of national security, that would be either due external or internal foreign attacks , terrorism, communalism, or natural or man-made calamity, the military power is something which is incumbent to fight against these to maintain security and peace in a country, Hence government of a nation should do good investment in their defense sector to build advanced weapons efficient machines ,skilled forces by utilizing various technologies used across the world. But Certainly we can ignore the role that cultural and artistic wealth plays in rendering a preeminent and superlative positions across the world.

Moving further, In retrospect from various historical evidences and anecdotes this has been patent that how powerful rulers had worked towards cultural and heritage development of their kingdom. For example many rulers in India are known for their unique artistic implementation during their reign, and this is the reason why encouraging art important in order to keep today's generation revered of their past cultural and traditional roots, India is nation of various arts and cultural dances , languages , heritage etc that has given it unique place across the world, besides would us be able to see the seven wonders if the arts and tradition were given importance.

To sum up both military and artistic development should go hand in hand and any nation should encourage its arts and cultural richness like defense.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, so, thus, while, for example, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 306.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40196078431 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78493046037 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601307189542 0.4932671777 122% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.2370786517 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 23.0359550562 221% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 165.863062662 60.3974514979 275% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 275.5 118.986275619 232% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.0 23.4991977007 217% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.3333333333 5.21951772744 294% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0963549811573 0.243740707755 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478614233553 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0209981783807 0.0758088955206 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0614923794687 0.150359130593 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00938250154347 0.0667264976115 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.5 14.1392134831 209% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.25 48.8420337079 23% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.4 12.1743820225 200% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.93 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.5 8.38706741573 125% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 31.5 11.8971910112 265% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.4 11.2143820225 200% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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