Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Every aspect is important for human-kind to grow and the government should keep this in mind while formulating new schemes for the public. The government's decision must be in the best interest of everyone who has elected the government. The issue about the investment on military and arts should be focussed as both the things play a very essential role to develop the company's economy and reputation. there are some examples using which I would like to showcase my views on this issue.
Firstly , the nation's military forces are not everything that a nation needs for its development. Apart from soldiers, there are economists involved in strategizing the plans for boosting the economy of the nation. if these economists are not provided with enough resources necessary for them to test the situation and conduct surveys for launching new program's then it can also call for a huge loss for the country's economy. So, the investment in arts is equally important as it is for military. As more
Secondly, there are several aspects covered in arts like it gives birth to painters. these people help in creating a good revenue for the nation indirectly. As the paintings made by these people get sold , the people who buy those paintings pay the taxes to the governments in return and this is how the government can generate more funds for investment into the military.
Though it is necessary for the countries to have strong military forces. but, there is also a need to have an understanding about the interdependency between these fields like arts and military. The initiative by the government to open more schools and colleges in the field of arts will help the people interested in these fields to pursue their career. Currently, due to lack of opportunities people prefer to leave their interest in arts and do jobs just to survive in this growing expensive world. But if they are chance to make career in arts they will always be happy to give and that will also help them to work with more dedication.
In the conclusion , i would like to give an opinion that the investment must be made in the same amount in both arts and military. The government should not be biased towards any of the fields and should consider the advantages of investing in both the domains.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1898.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 391.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85421994885 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66896486382 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498721227621 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0280990661 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.444444444 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7222222222 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180591330693 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591273997897 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329745533575 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103780535318 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0152601498584 0.0667264976115 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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