It is more harmful to compromise one's own beliefs than to adhere to them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Does adhering to one’s belief is a matter of choice or a priority? Is it really worth sticking to every practice and belief that our antecedents followed? Any sane and pragmatic soul would definitely question that. The fact that people follow certain rituals and beliefs just because their parents have been doing it, without even knowing the reason or logic to it is completely preposterous to me. In my opinion, one should have the knowledge about the dogmas that their clan follows, the specific details of why they follow it and are they really necessary to exercise. Reflecting upon the traditional culture of dowry in certain communities and Jehovah’s witness’ belief in blood transfusions on religious grounds, one could see how adhering to one’s belief does more harm than good.
Dowry has been exercised in various parts of India and Pakistan over ages now. The belief that a daughter is a burden to some people heavily relies upon the fact that they have to arrange for an affluent dowry in order to get a suitable and nice groom for their daughter. People, in these parts of the world try and save for this day, right after they give birth to a girl child. This practice, although anachronistic, are still followed by some people. Without even knowing that how it started and why it is still followed, people continue to do it. Some people think that just because they gave birth to a boy, it is their birth right to get the marriage settlement. Often times marriages don’t work out or the bride is tortured because her family was unable to satiate the in-laws’ gluttony. The point that even the educated lot is still in favor of this is beyond me. The groom’s family should consider that they are giving the most precious thing they could possibly give and yet, they want other things as well without considering if they are able to that. This practice seems illogical to me and harms a lot of homes and folks should consider these facets and not just blindly cling to it.
On the other hand, Jehovah’s witnesses are people are stern and strict regarding their morals, religion and way of living. They stick to their puritanical way of living and do not allow the transfusion of blood if they actually require it. Even, if the person is on the brink of death. This belief that God will protect and save them and that if the person is dying, it is the God’s will, lead me to question the “clinging on to one’s own beliefs is not harmful.”
So, by my reckoning, one should not just blindly adhere to whatever beliefs and rituals are exercised in their family and should be able to discern the effects they bear on people performing them. Also, if they are necessary to perform and significant to the family and hold some practical relevance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...er. People, in these parts of the world try and save for this day, right after they giv...
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Line 3, column 973, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...are giving the most precious thing they could possibly give and yet, they want other things as...
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Line 7, column 302, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mily and hold some practical relevance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, really, regarding, so, still, well, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 33.0505617978 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2338.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 485.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8206185567 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6155628636 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490721649485 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.4827430034 60.3974514979 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.333333333 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0952380952 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19047619048 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116888147061 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.033263078053 0.0831039109588 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507807939546 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0833761924583 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410184226848 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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