The following appeared in a memo at XYZ company.
"When XYZ lays off employees, it pays Delany Personnel Firm to offer those employees assistance in creating résumés and developing interviewing skills, if they so desire. Laid-off employees have benefited greatly from Delany's services: last year those who used Delany found jobs much more quickly than did those who did not. Recently, it has been proposed that we use the less expensive Walsh Personnel Firm in place of Delany. This would be a mistake because eight years ago, when XYZ was using Walsh, only half of the workers we laid off at that time found jobs within a year. Moreover, Delany is clearly superior, as evidenced by its bigger staff and larger number of branch offices. After all, last year Delany's clients took an average of six months to find jobs, whereas Walsh's clients took nine."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The memo proposes that XYZ Company should not switch from Delany Personnel Firm to Walsh because of the low numbers of people being rehired and also the time frame is greater, but fails to acknowledge certain crucial assumptions.
Starting with the fact that the employees that used Delany’s services benefitted from it by getting jobs quicker than those who did not take availed the offer, the writer discounts the factor that other people got jobs quicker because they might have various certifications or degrees. Also, there is possibility that they switched their fields and got a job completely different from what they used to do. Moreover, the employees that didn’t use the Delany’s service may have been waiting for better jobs or purposely not wanted to work or started their own businesses.
In addition, the writer proffers that Delany’s firm is better than Walsh’s because people got jobs within 3 to 6 months, whereas people who used Walsh took nine on the basis that Delany Personnel Firm is bigger and have much more staff and branch office. There again, the author fails to take into account that since Delany’s has much more offices, the numbers of employees getting rehired are only good from the one they have been going to. There are no statistics provided for the other offices. Are they doing as well as this office is? Are the numbers same for people getting rehired? The failure of the author to provide answers to these questions renders this claim unjustified.
Furthermore, it is stated the XYZ Company used Walsh Personnel Firm eight years ago and the results were not good. It is truly the case of apples and oranges because the writer has provided the stats of eight years back and comparing it with Delay’s numbers of today. Also, it is said that only half of the employees got job at that time. There could be a possibility that many people were living in that town because of that job and left it as soon as they were laid off or that they opened their own businesses or started working in different fields. The fact that how well is Walsh doing today is unknown making this claim is unsound.
The argument that XYZ Company should continue working with Delany’s and not switch to Walsh is specious on various grounds and therefore, fails to make a cogent case.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
need to make clear arguments by following 3 statements:
argument 1:
This would be a mistake because eight years ago, when XYZ was using Walsh, only half of the workers we laid off at that time found jobs within a year.
argument 2:
Moreover, Delany is clearly superior, as evidenced by its bigger staff and larger number of branch offices.
argument 3:
After all, last year Delany's clients took an average of six months to find jobs, whereas Walsh's clients took nine.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 1865 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.674 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.23 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.372 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.541 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.04 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, whereas, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90201005025 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50468740636 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482412060302 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.9693348908 57.8364921388 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.9375 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204474345911 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063565857377 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464682851157 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115857051668 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0218155926642 0.0628817314937 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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