The following recommendation appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell.
"Two years ago, the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel. During the past two years, tourism in Ocean View has increased, new businesses have opened there, and Ocean View's tax revenues have risen by 30 percent. Therefore, the best way to improve Hopewell's economy—and generate additional tax revenues—is to build a golf course and resort hotel similar to those in Ocean View."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument that to improve Hopewell’s economy and generate additional tax revenues, it would be wise to follow Ocean View’s path to build a similar golf course and resort hotel, is spurious on various accounts.
To begin with, it surmises that since the new municipal golf course and resort hotel worked for Ocean View and the tax revenues increased by 30 percent and new businesses opened up, it will also work for Hopewell. However, the author fails to validate this assumption. There are various factors that should be taken into account. For example, Ocean View’s population was already increasing by the time they opened the resort hotel and people started businesses there within this period. Hence, there was a boom in the economy.
On the other hand, the author has not considered the location of both the towns, which plays a crucial role in attracting tourism and potential investors. Maybe the location of Ocean View was very bucolic and people liked it as a recreational spot. Also, does Hopewell have the amount of land available to construct a golf course and a hotel resort? If the author had mentioned something about the location of both places being alike and the availability of the area, then the statement would have made a sound case.
More so, there may be other ways to improve Hopewell’s economy and generate revenues. Hopewell could hold county fairs and other festivals that might attract people towards the town. Or the city’s people could engage in trade with other cities to help improve the economy. In addition, they could build parks, zoos or other places and advertise them in order to attract tourists and increase tourism.
Therefore, the argument that Hopewell should follow the footsteps of Ocean View and build up a golf course and resort hotel to ameliorate the economy and help escalate tax revenues, is based on many inferences that are lack cogency and the claims should incorporate additional information so as to authenticate its conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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also need to argue:
1. maybe it works only for 'Two years ago', not nowadays.
2. it works for A, it may not work for B.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 331 350
No. of Characters: 1623 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.265 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.903 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.433 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.891 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.578 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.068 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 290, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ould incorporate additional information so as to authenticate its conclusion.
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for example, in addition, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1697.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 331.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12688821752 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6476118286 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534743202417 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.8259213736 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.133333333 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0666666667 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.70786347227 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233942085627 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685291377484 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734924025003 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133656719792 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605401421701 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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